As he walked along, the breeze brought her fragrance to him.
Nithin stopped and took a deep breath, smiling as he did.
Instantly, he imagined what might be in store, and her smile that he had seen just a few hours back.
After four hours, he heard the bell ring. He had been waiting quite impatiently.
“How heavenly is this fragrance, the aroma from mom’s curry,” thought the ten year old, as he opened his lunch box.
My theme for this April is something I call ON SHORT NOTICE. The topic for the letter H is Heavenly, suggested by Suzy, in the previous post. I request you, my readers, to suggest a word with I that might inspire my post for I. I’ll choose one from the options I get, and write on that. I won’t choose the same reader for successive days. Thanks in advance!
(© Vinay Leo R. @ I Rhyme Without Reason,
10th April, 2017)
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
And yet another beautiful post. It’s not easy to deliver a punch line that works every single time. You excel in writing short stories with a surprise ending- The classic O.Henry style..Impressed yet again Vinu.
The suggestion for I would be Imagination
Glad that twist works, and that the stories continue to be interesting, Janie. 🙂
awww.. how cute, when will my son say something like this. We are going mad feeding him some sort of food!!!
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Soon, Tina. 🙂 I think children begin to appreciate the food little later than we want them to. 😀 I’ve a couple of darling next door who used to only want cheese chips.
Hehe…I like how you’ve set it up for the read to expect something different. I’ll admit I never felt that at school as the food was always cold by lunch time!
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I know, Babby. 😀 That set up was one of my better ones so far, I think! Glad you liked the twist. Mom’s food was usually warm coz of the hotpot.
That made me smile 😀 even now I get excited thinking about home cooked meals 😀
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Oh yes. Home cooked meals are just the best, Raji. 🙂 Glad it brought a smile!
Oh yes. Food can arouse really deep emotions 🙂 good one.my suggestion for i – irresponsible
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It can, especially when it’s as delicious as Mom’s food, Jaish. Thank you! 😀
That’s lovely and sweet. Mum’s food is the best.
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Always, Parul. 😉 Thank you.
Oops!! My mind was wearing a different love story altogether. Never saw that coming. Brilliant 🙂
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That was the idea! 😀 Glad you liked the story, Swathi.
Awesome penned.
Thanks for sharing.
Thank you, Creative Life Star.
Now that’s a delicious twist. I didnt see that coming!
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Glad that twist was unexpected, Shilpa. 😀
I love the twist! I thought it was a love story:)
Brilliantly done!:)
Haha. 😀 Yes. Well, it’s a love story, but love for mother’s cooking, that’s all. 😉 Thank you, Mayuri.
Oh this one was good Vinay- didnt see that coming!!!! My word suggestion for I is “Immure” – it means to imprison or shut out!!
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Immure. Okay. 🙂 That sounds interesting. Glad you liked the twist, Shalini.
haha.. Remembered the school days, when a great smelling tiffin was on everyone’s hit list . My story about
Honor
I would suggest impatient as the next word
Yes. 🙂 That tiffin was much anticipated, and shared nicely too, Neha.
Thanks for choosing my word. Yes, the smell of mom’s cooking is truly heavenly.
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Thank you for inspiring the fiction, Suzy. 🙂
Haha, Vinay I went off on a different trail till I read the last sentence. Complete googly. I loved it though:)
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That was the idea, Radhika. 🙂 Glad you loved it. Thank you!
It started very seductively then ended completely differently. Brilliant. How the reader interprets it says quite a lot about them!
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🙂 Yeah. I tried to take the reader one way and then the other. Glad it worked! Thanks, Keith.
That was cute! 🙂 Aren’t we all just big fans of our mom’s cooking!
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We are. 🙂 That’s what we’ve grown up having, and that’s home. 😀 Thanks, Aditi.
so cute! mom’s cooking is truly heavenly, whether you are 10 or 40! no?
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Absolutely. I agree with you, though am not at that upper level just yet, Titli. 😉
This is such a beautiful piece of fiction Vinay! Nothing can ever beat mom’s food.
I would suggest Illusion. 🙂
True. That’s a heaven none else can compare to, Ramya. 🙂
Haha.. that heavenly smell from those lunch boxes. Many a day I used to finish my lunch in the 10 o clock break if I knew beforehand it was something I loved.
I for identical or imaginary?
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Oh. We never had a 10am break during school days, Namratha, so wouldn’t know. 🙂 The lunch hour was eagerly awaited always, though.
I’m considering both options, but my muse seems on hibernation till closer to midnight. 😀 Lemme see what she says.
Loved this short and sweet story 🙂
For “I” I’d suggest Illusion .
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🙂 Glad you loved the short and sweet story! Thanks, Reema.
Smart and unexpected take for the word ‘heavenly’ .. which is a good thing as a short story writer.
For I – incredible, inedible, identity, identical twin, inseparable, ill
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Yes. I like the twist at the end. 🙂 Takes the reader on a whole other direction.
Ill? Sounds like something a doctor would suggest, eh? 😉 Thanks, Roshan.
Very nice. Even a 10 year old appreciates a heavenly fragrance.
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Yes. That fragrance is just out of this world, Moonie. 🙂
so sweet! this could have gone anywhere but the ma ke haath ka khaana made it very sweet
for I, how about indecision
Glad the twist was a sweet one, Anks. 🙂 Thank you.
I thought it was going to take a romantic twist, but this was the best twist ever. WOnderful
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Yes. That was the set up. 🙂 Glad the twist was good enough to be wonderful. Thank you, Menaka.
That’s a brilliant twist. I never saw that coming 😛
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Glad you liked the twist, and couldn’t see it coming. 😛 Maybe you were busy making idli, Shalzzz. 😉
I love the way you weave the suspense till the end. You manage to do it every time. The fragrance from mom’s curry is indeed heavenly!
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I like leaving the suspense till the end. 🙂 It makes it more worthwhile writing and reading! 😀
That curry is definitely heavenly even now, Sreedeep.