Written as part of Friday Fictioneers, which offers the image as inspiration to write a fiction in 100 words (or less).
The Plan
It had to be done in the cover of darkness.
“We’ll be rich!” I cried, pulling up the chest we had chanced upon that morning amid the leaves.
Rowan laughed, nodding. We were two orphans of whom no one expected anything.
The sound of our oars echoed as they cut the water.
A small blub broke the silence, as water began to seep in.
“We’ve to drop the chest, or we’ll never make it,” I cried.
The splash told I was wrong.
“Plan B. I’ll be rich,” I heard, the cold waters pulling me down as the boat moved away.
(© 3rd February 2016)
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
Human nature is self serving and selfish isn’t it? What is the worth of all the money if you have no one to spend it with?
Exactly. But greed does dominate judgment on the spur of the moment, I suppose, Jb.
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Nice story, but I am a bit confused… was there a hole in the boat? If so, how did Rowan row away? Or is the narrator tipped overboard…
Yeah, Claire. Rowan saved the chest instead of the narrator. 🙁
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Greed overtakes sensibility, really.
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Yes Sims. Quite sadly, and more often than not.
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Short yet vivid piece, speaks volumes. Warm greetings!
Greetings, blogoratti. Thank you. 🙂
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I was a little unclear about what happened at the end there. I think it was the use of the word ‘in’ in ‘ waters rushing in’ which made me think the poor victim was in some kind of container. Great story though, and yes, I can well imagine that happening.
Hmm. I modified it slightly. I think that should be clearer now, Sandra. 🙂 Glad you liked the story.
Never trust an orphan, I always say.
Ah. I guess he felt he had nothing to lose, not even a friend or partner-in-crime. Thanks, Patrick.
Yikes. The closeness we feel between your two orphans at the start is soon shown to be illusory when there’s a chance of wealth. Great story. I love how you’ve used point of view.
Yes. Cash conquers closeness in the end, sadly. Not always true, but in this case. Glad you felt the story was great, Margaret. 🙂
Greed is one human characteristic that has took us nowhere but destruction. Well-penned, Vinay!
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Yes. Unfortunately, that is so. Glad you felt it was well-penned. Thanks, Rex.
Greed is the most tendency to unlast friendship.
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Yeah. Greed does that, Bjorn. Unfortunately.
Wow – cold. But how very realistic in this world. Great story.
Thanks, athling. Yep. Realistic, sadly.
Very interesting 😀
Thank you, Shivangi. 🙂
Ahh, the dark side of humanity. Compelling, yet heartbreaking. Love the way you worked the twist at the end.
Glad you liked the twist, and the portrayal, jademwong. 🙂 Thanks.
Human greed took over the humanity I suppose! Interesting Twist!
Yeah. Greed can do that, unfortunately. Thank you, Ira.
Chilling! I wish people we trust do not betray us. Nicely written!
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Yes. Very true. Even I wish the same. Thanks, Sreedeep.
A very good example of why true partnerships are difficult if impossible to have…
Yeah. Thank you, Dale.
nice twist. Human beings are quite selfish… and that leads to regrettable actions.
Yeah. Sad but true. Thanks, Pixie.
The word ‘Selfish’ came to mind when I read the last word. How sad that both were orphans and yet one arose to bitterness.
This is a story that begs dialog and more written. It leaves the reader with many questions. I enjoyed it very much and would read a longer version.
A longer version? I will try some day soon, Isadora. Glad you enjoyed the story very much, and felt it’d be good if longer too.
The gold glittered a little too brightly. Great job!
Yes. A little brighter than their friendship, sadly. Thanks, Lillie.
Harsh reality! People go after money and fame these days. If possible by backstabbing your friend! :/
Nicely put.
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Yes! Sad but true. Even people stab the back of friends for the sake of money. 🙁 Glad you felt it was nicely put, Shalzzz.