Written as part of Set The Challenge #7 and Wordplay #8 at A Prompt Each Day. And shared with The Tuesday Platform at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads and with Poetry Pantry at Poets United. Image Source: Hourglass by Michael Himbeault (via Wikimedia Commons).
Let’s let go
tick-tock, tick-tock, the clock ticks on now
we wait to heal, but time moves on
we hold on, but the sand falls
the wound still stays, pains
time will heal, we say
but it remains
till we hold
it close
letβs
let
go now
time we did
on our own too
help time to heal us
not suffer till mind breaks
one step at a time, letβs move
find new joys and forget old scars
letβs let go, and find time for better times
(Β© 19th July 2015)
i like this nonet form…definitely to find time for better times is the wisest thing to do….
Absolutely. π thank you, and glad you liked the form, Sumana. π
That’s unbelievable! So skilfully done.
Thank you, and glad you liked it, Tulika. π
Such an intriguing form π
Loved it!
Thanks a lot, Sanaa. π
Nice mirror poem leo. The things we carry can surely weigh us down and even choke the life out of us for their heaviness. Letting go, learning to live again – is a discipline of daily laying it down. Imho.
Not sure if it becomes a routine immediately, XPoet. π But in time, yes. That discipline is quite necessary and becomes so. Glad you liked the mirror poem.
“one step at a time…”
for sometimes the hurt is so deep its the only way to let time work in our lives; have a nice Sunday
much love…
Yes. One step at a time is the only way at times. Thank you, Gillena. Have a great week!
Tick tock tick tock..there is indeed no time like the present..an effective reflection of time in motion…
Glad you liked the poetry and the reflection, Jae. π
Your poem expresses so well the idea of ‘time heals all wounds.’ Though the wounds are still there, we find ways of letting go of the strength they have over us and find new joys. I like the way you wrote this poem in hourglass form & the photo you chose. Very effective & powerful!
Thank you, and glad you liked the structure and the photo, Mary. π Letting go of old wounds and finding joy is very important, yes!
Perhaps easier said than done but its best to let go (and forgive) the hurts and scars and move on with each new day ~ I like the shape of the words too ~
Very much so; easier said than done is right. But one must try, to let go. π Thank you, Grace.
What a lovely piece and the way it’s written in the pattern of a hour glass is very clever. A truly brilliant read indeed.
Many thanks for visiting and leaving a nice comment, much appreciated. Have a fantastic week!
Many thanks for returning the visit too, Blogoratti. π I am glad you liked the pattern of the poem.
I enjoyed visiting your blog and reading the metaphor poetry there. Have a great week too!
Find new joys forget old scars’ these are beautiful words.The nonet is superb.
Thanks, Usha ma’am. π Glad you liked the nonet.
I thought this piece was very creative and the structure nicely done. A different way to convey your message. love, love, love it!!!
Glad you loved it, Jamztoma. π The hourglass structure is one of my favorite ones.
A way of reminding us that healing comes in a right time and that if it’s taking time, it’s important to think of the good times for the time being.
Lovely poetic form too, Leo
Thank you, totomai. Yes. Important to think of the happy times, yes. Glad you liked the poem and the form. π
That sounds like a good plan – healing and better days ahead!
I certainly hope so, Sherry. π
i love the way you represented your feelings in that sand clock!! Clever portraying βΊοΈ
Thank you, Deepti. π I’m glad you enjoyed the poem.
”Pain remains till we hold it close”
So true. It’s all about the choice we make. Time is a healer. It depends on us if we go along the direction of winds or slow down.
Absolutely! Time heals, but we should do our part too, Sims. π Cheers!
Perfect sentiments about letting go and healing or holding on…love the hour glass made of words.
Glad you liked the poem and the hourglass, Donna. π
Delightful image formed by your words that remind us that it is time to let go,
Elizabeth
It is. π That’s important. We’ve to know when it’s time. Thank you, Elizabeth.
I like it very much and add my hopes to others’.
Thank you, Rosemary Nissen-Wade. π
Yes, there are definitely things we need to let go, otherwise the pain is too great to bare … this is beautifully expressed and great advice on healing and moving forward in life π
Glad you liked the poem and the thoughts, Loredana. π Thank you very much.
That’s simply brilliant. Love it!
Thanks, Shashank. π
The hourglass image itself is exquisite Vinay. Your words speak truth. We can make ourselves sicker by a negative attitude. Tho as a nurse I know end stage diseases are like a roller coaster ride for the patient and the family.
Thank you, Moonie. π Glad you liked it. Depends on the situation of course, sometimes, it’s just not time to let go.
Sometimes things are perfect. Not often, but sometime. This was indeed perfect. The form delightful and attractive to the eye and the words literally hummed along within my mind – making perfect sense. Thank you.
Glad you felt the poem was perfect and it made sense to you. Thank you, Liz Rice-Sosne. π
The message is so true. And you stayed true to form. Great write
Thanks, glmeisner. π Glad you liked it.
How do you write so beautifully, with so many rules to adhere to!
That’s part of the fun, Alok. π It just comes out. The form in this case has mainly syllable rule. π No meter or rhyme etc. Glad you felt it was beautiful. Thank you so very much. π
Easier said than done, don’t you think? π But this where we all end up finally- letting go!
Amazing poem. Especially loved the way you crafted- like sands of time! <3
Yeah. Easier said than done, Shalzz. But eventually, we have to.
It’s not nice to hold on to the wound forever. π Time won’t heal if we don’t let it!
Glad you liked the poem, and the shape. π
Enjoy the “time” here. Like your style for it. π
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Thanks, ZQ. π Cheers!
What a brilliant form poem. Totally awesome. I love it!
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Thank you, Wendy. π Glad you liked both the poem and the form. Cheers!
Amazing job! Especially love the format of the poem – in an hourglass! Brilliant!
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Hey SJ. π Thank you very much. Glad you liked the poem. π
I love your poem, Leo π very creative!
Thank you, LLM. π Glad you loved it.
Wow! As much as I love your poetry woven with simple words, I loved the way you represented them to match the shape of the hourglass. Kudos!
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Thank you, Rex π Glad you liked the poem and the shape! Nice to see you here.
Let go. But wear the scars proudly. They are what make you you.
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The scars, like the memories, stay on, but they fade, I think. π
No need to hide them if they’re still showing after you let go, but it’s important that a time comes when you do let go. π
Thank you, Cookie. π Hope you liked the poem. π
Very nice layout of the poem and yes we need to let go off the pain so that time can heal us.
Thanks, Vandana. π Glad you liked the poetry and its layout.
Ah an interesting form… quite challenging am sure! Nicely done!
Thanks. π Just the syllable count is a bit challenging, the structure comes on its own, I feel. π Glad you liked it, Thotpurge.
A marvel it is.. A sketch using words? Super!
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Thanks, Satya. π Glad you liked the poem.
So needed to hear this today. Loved it and how beautifully you have written it π
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Glad you liked it, and how I’ve written it, Aathira. π
lovely shape poem, not easy to do too. π
and the words are certainly something to mull over.
Glad you liked it, dSnake. π Thanks.
Naice! I’ve always loved the hourglass image, and the visual impact of the words, that match the theme, absolutely wonderful!
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I’m quite a fan of hourglasses too, Usha. π Glad you felt this poem, and the structure was wonderful. Thank you.
This is a fun poem to actually read aloud. Thanks.
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Thank you, Buddah. π
Such wonderful request… full of tomorrows. β₯
Yes. It would be, Magaly. π Thank you.
Time is the best healer and the scars we bear represent our perspective. Oh nicely done on the hourglass. But then you knew that already π
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Yah. I was quite pleased with the way the hourglass came out, Jb. π Glad you liked it and yes, time is indeed a wonderful healer if we let it to be. π
Now this is a profound message in a few words. A wonderful shape poetry too!
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Thank you, Shilpa. π
Beautifully done, Leo. π
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Thank you, Celestine. π