Inspired by the photograph at Friday Fictioneers. Photograph courtesy: Melanie Greenwood.
The Temple Maze
Word Count: 100
The light of the rising sun skipped through the branches of the trees, falling on the shoulders of the two friends as they made their way up the steps.
“There’s this maze in the temple garden,” said Dojin, removing his slippers, “I went inside the last time I came here.”
“Oh! That sounds fun,” replied Partha, following suit.
“Not really. The maze ends where it started. What fun is that?”
Dojin looked at Partha, who was lost in thought. When he snapped back to the present, he smiled.
“I think it means you are where you were meant to be.”
(© 4th February 2015)
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
That felt like a tablet.
Tiny but complete. Wish I could write like that!
Good one! 🙂
Give it a try 🙂 Don’t know till you know. I love writing long fiction, but this is fun too, Pooja 😀
Glad you liked my story 🙂
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It would be so wonderful if we could be in the place we are meant to be…and such wisdom in the little boy’s words. I wonder what he was thinking about though, right before he snapped into the present.
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I think we are, Ishi 🙂 Reminded of the quote by Heraclitus. This moment, we are who we are, where we are and that’s where we were meant to be.
It’s not for the next moment 😀 Next moment might be somewhere else. Dojin and Partha might be inside the temple next 🙂 And he was wondering about the maze I think.
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Dear Vinay,
Life’s a journey and sometimes a maze with unexpected twists and turns. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Well, absolutely 🙂 Even the twist and turn to the start was unexpected.
Glad you liked my story, Rochelle 😀 Thanks!
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Very profound. Lovely fable.
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Thank you, Sandra 🙂
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What a cool little story to describe an very interesting concept. I love the idea of a maze representing life. Well done!
Glad you liked the idea and the story, Jessie 🙂 Thank you for dropping by!
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Great thought to hang on to.
Thanks, Patrick 🙂
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This is lovely and very profound. ‘You are where you were meant to be’ would that we all remember that.
Dee
It would be good if we remember it 🙂 But at times, it feels unbelievable, Dee. Glad you liked the story. 😀 Thank you.
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I really like this. Dojin is in love with a Partha (that’s my take on it).
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LOL 😀 Glad you liked the story, Joy.
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What a great take on the prompt. The simplicity of the dialogue of the characters works really well with the story behind them.
Thank you very much, Carol 🙂 Glad you liked the simplicity.
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I really did love the idea behind this. great words.
Thank you, Caicedo 🙂
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ah, yes.
We are all right where we should be.
Randy
Nice fun tale.
Glad you liked the tale, Randy 🙂 Thank you.
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Such a maze would be a good reminder to be content with the present moment, and our present lives. Well imagined, well told.
Thank you, and glad you liked it, Margaret 🙂
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Clever and subtle. While on the face of it, it is anecdotal, it also hinted to me of an encounter between guru and student. I looked up ‘Partha’ to learn it was the name of a warrior-prince in the Bhagavad-Gita. I immediately thought of Arjuna, also that he was a warrior who, at the opening of BG, was in conflict about going to war, that he and Krsna were good friends, and indeed that the BG is a conversation between Arjuna and Krsna, wherein Krsna is revealing to Arjuna the mysteries of existence. 🙂
Well, Partha is another name for Arjuna, and the Bhagavad Gita is part of the Mahabharata epic of course 🙂 Glad you liked the story and that you felt it was clever and subtle. Thanks, Ann.
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Hmmm… What can I say to this one, it is written in such a clever way and to get that punch in just 100 words is amazing!
I wonder if that happens in real life too, everyone finding themselves where they are meant to be, all the time?
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Not always, DS. But it does happen 🙂 Glad you felt it had the punch in 100 words.
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