In response to the prompts at OctPoWriMo Day 15, and for UBC Day 15.
now
half way
can I play
rest my tired mind
pause my journey a day
and expect not to fall behind
that dreams will remain easy to still find
let me take a breather, then keep going somehow
so I pray they continue to be kind
for sometimes I do travel blind
trust what my instinct says
keep what I find
so I play
a day
now
The poetry form is a Diatelle, which has a syllable structure of 1-2-3-4-6-8-10-12-10-8-6-4-3-2-1 and a rhyme scheme of a-b-b-c-b-c-c-a-c-c-b-c-b-b-a. It looks best center-aligned.
(15th Oct 2014)
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
Very Important to play. All work and no plat makes Vins a dull boy na. I think this imaginary race we are running, is funny. It keeps us running all our lives non stop and we expect to stop and rest after a “little while” which never comes. So we should just stop whenever we feel like and take a break.
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Yes, I guess a bit of rest is very important to replenish the energy to continue further 🙂 Glad that my poem brought out this thoughtful comment from you, Jb. 🙂
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I love the format of this and you did an amazing job with it.
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Thank you, Laura 🙂
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A new poetry form, beautiful. Bookmarked for reference!
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Thanks, Michelle.
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I really like the message in this. Thank you.
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Glad you liked the message, Fida. Thanks!
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I love the way you weave simple words to create magic. Poetry is something I am not at all good with. Gotta learn a lot from poets like you.
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My vocabulary is restricted to few words only, so the poems end up simple, Rekha 😉 “Poets like me”? 😮 Gosh! Thank you. Glad you consider me worth learning from 😀 What an honor!
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I just said in a previous comment how difficult I find it to follow form… this was so well done… To stick to a physical form as well… wow.
I like trying out new forms of poetry once in a while, Zoe 🙂 so this was quite fun to try! Glad you liked the poem!
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Hey that is such a beautiful poem! Message conveyed well and the structure is so appealing 🙂
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Yeah. Appealing structure, that’s for sure 🙂 A diamond for Ishi, both the poem and how it looks 😉 Alle, twinny?
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A reminder here, thanks. Going with our instincts and living in the present moment, the best things we all can do. 🙂
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Wonder if you swapped the two comments by mistake, Payal 😉 This reminds me of yesterday’s poem somehow O:-) But glad you liked the poem(s) 😀
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A lovely poem and your form was beautifully perfect!
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Thanks, Bastet 🙂
Keep going and follow your instinct. Beautiful message and the shape you gave it. Superr Dearo 😀
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The shape comes automatically with the form, Sims 🙂 Glad you liked the message.
yes.. its important to play – and play a little outside and not just video games 😛
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wrong link posted! damn!
corrected now
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LOL @ the wrong link 😀
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True 😛 Good thing I don’t only play video games then, Pixie 😀
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