July 2013 – Haiku #01

caught off-guard
I run after
my umbrella

~!*!~

rumbling sky…
only paper boats
on the road

~!*!~


Shared with Write Tribe (Prompt: Rain).


(July 13th, 2013)

Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.

  

24 thoughts on “July 2013 – Haiku #01

  1. I love the paper boats on the road – what a pretty picture even though the sky rumbles.
    Dropping by from the write tribe haiku prompt.

  2. I so love both your Haiku. You do manage to show more than you tell. These come very close to how a Haiku should be written. They capture the essence of it so well. Superb both of them. But I would pay a little attention to the syllable count 🙂

    • Thank you, Ruch, for finding my haiku to be superb. 🙂 I enjoyed writing them.

      Regarding syllable count, in contemporary haiku, or haiku in English, it is not 5-7-5 exact format. because one “on” or Japanese syllable is not the same as one English syllable. So typically, it is 10-17 syllables. You can consider Basho’s old frog haiku itself for e.g. As you can see in that, it is 8 syllables only.

  3. The translated Haiku rarely follow the 5-7-5 format as it is near impossible to get the essence/meaning of the original Haiku and also stick to the format. The Haiku written originally in English though, are supposed to follow the rules. But Liberties are taken often ! But I don’t think I have heard of Haiku spanning 10-17 syllables in English ! Then it wouldn’t be really a Haiku would it !

    • I have 🙂 There’s a whole Wiki page for the same. And yes, I agree that traditionally, the structure is 5-7-5. but I do not feel it is strict. A haiku written in Japanese has 5-7-5 on. And an on is not the same as a syllable. So a haiku that is written in English, I feel, can be less than 17 syllables. Of course, that is my understanding.

  4. Cute!!
    I could almost picture you running after your umbrella!! 😉
    and the second one brought back beautiful memories of childhood evenings! 🙂

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