March 2013 Haiku #01

beneath
thin ice
a river
agitated


This is a four line variant of the haiku, also called the Haiqua.


Shared with Carpe Diem and d’Verse Open Link Night.


(March 5th, 2013)

Poetry & writing to me are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.

28 thoughts on “March 2013 Haiku #01

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  1. Thank you leo for coming along Carpe Diem. I like this four line haiku very much. I know this form and I like it very much, but … I am more of the three-line haiku. Thank you for sharing this on Carpe Diem.

    • I’m fond of the three line haiku too, Kristjaan. πŸ™‚ This particular one fit more perfectly into a haiqua, so used that. Cheers!

  2. This form is new to me too. The thing that interested me about your poem is that the four lines of this particular poem suggest the layers of the river to me. It is always a pleasure to read your poems, Leo.

    • It could suggest that too, Wabi πŸ™‚ Glad your thought went that way, and a pleasure to read your comments too! Thank you very much.

  3. Whew. That is powerful; strong writing. I had a physical response in my throat—a tightening that forced my swallow, in order that I might verify I am still liquid in the right places.

  4. I enjoyed this for the natural imagery, and also for the many ways the phenomenon you described can be a metaphor for the human psyche… You wrote this piece with quiet attention.

    • Yes, we are at times like that. Hard faced, or smiling at times, but beneath, there is agitation and worry. Thank you, Ursa.

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