retirement:
after a long journey
dusk dawns
Shared with Haiku Heights, OSI, Poetry Pantry and dVerse Open Link Night .
(January 21st, 2013)
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing to me are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
Perfect.
Thank you, Kim 🙂
And then it’s time to rest 🙂
Indeed, Amrit. But thoughts can’t rest all the time 😉
wonderful play on words, perfect sense 🙂
Thank you, Dadirri 🙂
Glad it is dusk dawning and not night falling!
Loved the haiku – the many meanings of each word and how tightly crafted it is (ultimately like life)
Thank you, Judith & Max 🙂
I can relate to this haiku,,,as my “dusk” is definitly “dawning” 🙂
Love the play with dawn in line three!
Thank you, Wabi 🙂
😉 I hope that dusk is very calm and peaceful, Elle.
And world is beautiful in twilight!
Nice Haiku.
There is beauty every time, but most at dusk I guess. Thanks Harshad. 🙂
You have nailed it!
I hope so, Mary 😉
Short and sweet. Love the final line.
Thank you, and glad you loved it, Gretchen 🙂
Perfect.
Thank you, IHP 🙂
Fantastic haiku Leo. A great way to retire is to gaze up at the sky.
Yes, to see the clouds float by and relax 😉 Thank you, Write Girl.
I agree with you….the dawn finally breaks. Nice haiku.
Thanks, Rallentanda 🙂
a journey i dont know i will ever see the end of…but if i do i hope its as magic as dusk…
I hope the same for you, Brian. Thanks 🙂
Lots of good word-play in just three lines!
Thank you, Mary 🙂
nice analogy between dusk and retirement! well put, as always 🙂
Glad you liked it, Sanjana 🙂 Thanks! Cheers.
a dawn of a wonderful dusk indeed..
(http://mryandrspace.blogspot.com)
Thank you, Vidya 🙂
I hear you… It does have that sense of finality. I love your haiku. 😉
Eliz
Mine is here: http://positivekismet.blogspot.com/
Thank you, Eliz 🙂 Glad you liked it.
nice haiku. Well said. Thanks
Thank you, Fred 🙂
Dusk dawns..love that
Thank you, Susie 🙂
Nice work. Sort an all in one poem.
Melanie
Thank you, Melanie 🙂 Yeah, sort of 😉
Very clever ~ but as a retired person the thought that this is the dusk of my life scares me!
Ah, it might be … definitely. Thanks, Heaven.
Retirement is like a twilight/dusk in a working person’s life! A clever and thoughtful analogy! And especially love the oxymoron in the last line, suggesting that it is a lingering dusk!
Thank you, Gemma 🙂 Glad you liked the haiku and the thought.
clever use of words dusk dawns. Perfect haiku.
Perpetual Dark
Thank you, Meenakshi 🙂
Dusk dawns… I like that juxtaposition. Retirement does guarantee peace and rest doesnt it?
Guess I should retire from studying too! 😀
Nice Haiku Leo 🙂
Esp. retire from Physics, eh Kirti? 😉 Glad you liked it.
beginnings and endings
like flying towards a sunsset
Exactly 🙂 Thank you, Lucy.
I never would have thought to pair dusk and dawn—but you did, and successfully!
Dusk in the Graveyard
Thank you, MMT 🙂 I’m glad you liked the pairing. Cheers!
crisp and perfect . . loved the last line the most 🙂
Thank you, Maliny 🙂
great play on the words! an exciting new journey begins!
Yes, I guess it will be exciting too for them. Thanks, Robyn.