Kidnapped (Part 5)

(Continued from ~Part 1~, ~Part 2~, ~Part 3~ and ~Part 4~…)

I find Melanie in the next room. We struggle to our feet, and head toward the exit, when we hear little Natalie’s scream for help again. I tell Melanie to go get help and go back inside to find her.

It’s coming from the master bedroom. I run in to see her pinned to the floor, and Kevin, a former classmate of mine who I’d got expelled, on her stomach, assaulting her. My best friend Keith (Key) is there near the bed, knocked out, his gun near the open door. I think only of Natalie, take the gun and fire.

Kevin crumbles to the floor, dead from the bullet through his brain. I go toward Natalie who is still down, shaking all over, and help her to her feet. I put my arm on her shoulder, and we walk toward the exit again, slowly. She’s crying, and I try to console her. Melanie is standing outside still, and runs inside to help me with Natalie. We are almost out; we can see the light at the end of the tunnel.

—-~*~—-

It has been a day since we came here. The church nearby seems a distant memory now. The graveyard behind it is full of mourning people today. Maybe it is because it’s a Sunday and morning mass has just finished. As I watch on, the gathering breaks up. There was a memorial function outside the church today.

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As the families of the dead move away slowly, leaving empty chairs in the misty morning, a lone girl stays back. She has two roses in her hand. She hasn’t had the chance to place them yet. She moves towards a single headstone a little away from where she had sat. And with a tear, places one on each of the two coffins sharing it.

Melanie comes near me, and squeezes my hand. We know. The girl closes her eyes and we move closer to her and the headstone which says, “Here lies Raj Thomas and Melanie Cruz, united in death as they were alive.” We place our hands in hers, but we don’t know if she can feel it.

As she walks past the chairs, she turns back one last time. There are no tears this time. She just looks on at another headstone, her brother’s, which had the words, “Keith Sullivan – fondly remembered by all” on it. Almost all…

—-~*~—-

Magpie Tales #91

Magpie Tales is hosted weekly by Tess Kincaid. She gives an image for inspiring a poem or vignette. The image is from there, and its the 91st week at the meme.


© (14/11/2011)

Poetry & writing to me are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.

18 thoughts on “Kidnapped (Part 5)

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  1. Whoa.. this was the hardest I admit, in my whole blogging life. I hadn't been reading the sequels coz unlike most of them who waited with bated breath to know what was going to happen next, I preferred to read only when there would be no more'to be contd.'Your gripping stories tested my patience a lot 😛 Loveddd your fiction. You are very good at creating suspense, maybe you should start penning a novel?

  2. Whoa.. this was the hardest I admit, in my whole blogging life. I hadn't been reading the sequels coz unlike most of them who waited with bated breath to know what was going to happen next, I preferred to read only when there would be no more'to be contd.'Your gripping stories tested my patience a lot 😛 Loveddd your fiction. You are very good at creating suspense, maybe you should start penning a novel?

  3. > That's not the fun part of the series, to wait till the end and read it from the start. It doesn't feel as exciting if you read it at a stretch than wait after parts, ADREAMYGAL. That said, thanks for liking my story. No, no novel planned any time soon.>> Thank you, Dr. FTSE. Glad you liked it, though you had to read at a stretch. :)>> Neither did I, but I didn't want to go the usual rout, JANHVI. I'm glad it worked out in the end. Thanks!>> Thank you, BRIAN. Glad you liked the conclusion & the way I put in the picture! 🙂

  4. > That's not the fun part of the series, to wait till the end and read it from the start. It doesn't feel as exciting if you read it at a stretch than wait after parts, ADREAMYGAL. That said, thanks for liking my story. No, no novel planned any time soon.>> Thank you, Dr. FTSE. Glad you liked it, though you had to read at a stretch. :)>> Neither did I, but I didn't want to go the usual rout, JANHVI. I'm glad it worked out in the end. Thanks!>> Thank you, BRIAN. Glad you liked the conclusion & the way I put in the picture! 🙂

  5. maybe, it wont be as exciting as reading in parts, but am very impatient when it comes to your stories, coz you way of narration is so gripping that keeps many a readers like me hooked. Besides I love reading the story in flow 😛 😀

  6. maybe, it wont be as exciting as reading in parts, but am very impatient when it comes to your stories, coz you way of narration is so gripping that keeps many a readers like me hooked. Besides I love reading the story in flow 😛 😀

  7. @ADREAMYGAL,Whatever :P@STORYTELLER,At first, I did think of going the happy ending route, but then again, I didn't want to keep it the usual! :)@POOJA,Thank you 🙂 If I ever finish writing my novel, and get it published, I'll send you a copy 😛

  8. @ADREAMYGAL,Whatever :P@STORYTELLER,At first, I did think of going the happy ending route, but then again, I didn't want to keep it the usual! :)@POOJA,Thank you 🙂 If I ever finish writing my novel, and get it published, I'll send you a copy 😛

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