forgive my broken feet,
for they are dead tired;
dancing with the ghosts
gathered from my past,
around me like a hoop.
for they are dead tired;
dancing with the ghosts
gathered from my past,
around me like a hoop.
painful my life, topples;
hit by a thousand tears,
I wish to run far away;
but my shoulder bolted
causes me to die here,
drop to my knees again.
I wonder, if I speak out,
will relief be discovered
or will my heart burst,
drowning in shallow sea
of an unending horror.
alas, I have not a soul
to listen to my sorrows;
and my words to stay,
forever inked in blood
on my heart’s papers.

for one single impression, the sunday whirl, d’verse poets pub (open link night) and the poet’s rally.. image found through google images from this source.
© (october 18, 2011)
Mashallah! :OI loved the third and fourth line. So well put.And aye, your signature is really nice.
Mashallah! :OI loved the third and fourth line. So well put.And aye, your signature is really nice.
Another beautiful dedication to writing bro… true, for some, writing is their only choice to vent it all out…
Another beautiful dedication to writing bro… true, for some, writing is their only choice to vent it all out…
I like your closing couplet very much.
I like your closing couplet very much.
Our heart is the most resiliant journal of all.
Our heart is the most resiliant journal of all.
So many souls reading these lines.. Leo.. what else.. it's all so good ..well written..
So many souls reading these lines.. Leo.. what else.. it's all so good ..well written..
@Crystal,Thanks! 🙂 Glad you liked it! My signature has been the same since the old days, maybe you forgot! 😀
@Crystal,Thanks! 🙂 Glad you liked it! My signature has been the same since the old days, maybe you forgot! 😀
@Arv,Yes, esp. some like me! 🙂
@Arv,Yes, esp. some like me! 🙂
@I'mNotAVerse,Thanks and glad you liked it! 🙂
@I'mNotAVerse,Thanks and glad you liked it! 🙂
@Lisa,Very true! It can hold the most entries too!
@Lisa,Very true! It can hold the most entries too!
@Rameshji,Yes of course.. Lot many souls who can relate too..
@Rameshji,Yes of course.. Lot many souls who can relate too..
Profound and I love the last paragraph…Saru
Profound and I love the last paragraph…Saru
Wonderful last stanza!hanging my head
Wonderful last stanza!hanging my head
great poem… a true poet's blood is their ink. we must bleed our passion
great poem… a true poet's blood is their ink. we must bleed our passion
I have ears to hear and love to listen! Save the paper of your heart for when you find the one that compels you to fill the pages with light and joy and love! tonight, you'll find lots of ears willing to listen! Wonderful, yet sad write, Leo.
I have ears to hear and love to listen! Save the paper of your heart for when you find the one that compels you to fill the pages with light and joy and love! tonight, you'll find lots of ears willing to listen! Wonderful, yet sad write, Leo.
Love how this just flies off the tongue and agreed last stanza realyl brought it home.
Love how this just flies off the tongue and agreed last stanza realyl brought it home.
Reads as the uncertain hand of journals – when all pretense and masks fall; a fine closing stanza – for the heart is the first and the greatest journal of our lives, particularly our writers' lives.
Reads as the uncertain hand of journals – when all pretense and masks fall; a fine closing stanza – for the heart is the first and the greatest journal of our lives, particularly our writers' lives.
def full of emotion…and true writing often in the blood still warm from our hearts…
def full of emotion…and true writing often in the blood still warm from our hearts…
My paper had been a wonderful listening ear.. as is yours..I hear the plea and your paper as well..well done..
My paper had been a wonderful listening ear.. as is yours..I hear the plea and your paper as well..well done..
Oh, I really feel this one. It seems like there is no right way to go when you are buried under secrets, but even if it's hard to speak, in the end it's always better to be free. Someone will listen, just be sure to tell the right someone.
Oh, I really feel this one. It seems like there is no right way to go when you are buried under secrets, but even if it's hard to speak, in the end it's always better to be free. Someone will listen, just be sure to tell the right someone.
a wonderful write.
a wonderful write.
You last stanza stand out so much for me and this is so well penned a great ending to a fantastic piecehttp://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/18/farewell-my-three-legged-friend/
You last stanza stand out so much for me and this is so well penned a great ending to a fantastic piecehttp://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/18/farewell-my-three-legged-friend/
This was a deep enjoyable read.
This was a deep enjoyable read.
Waahh.. I loved the last para totally 🙂
Waahh.. I loved the last para totally 🙂
Nicely worded poem Leo!!…and my favorite is the opening stanza with some fabulous imagery ~ Dead tired, broken feet dancing with the ghosts who are dancing around you in circles!! Wow! that was good!! You end it on a sad note 🙁
Nicely worded poem Leo!!…and my favorite is the opening stanza with some fabulous imagery ~ Dead tired, broken feet dancing with the ghosts who are dancing around you in circles!! Wow! that was good!! You end it on a sad note 🙁
Hmm..nice poem Vinay. Beautiful!!! I cannot imagine that you are the same Vinay I talk to on Indichat. You surely seem to have MPD!
Hmm..nice poem Vinay. Beautiful!!! I cannot imagine that you are the same Vinay I talk to on Indichat. You surely seem to have MPD!
I just love the way you express emotions… a lonely write yet so beautiful to read …
I just love the way you express emotions… a lonely write yet so beautiful to read …
Such a sad and powerful poem, Leo, something I suspect we've all felt before. I can definitely relate to the feeling of having no one to listen to my troubles. Of course we can always go to God in prayer, but sometimes we need another human to hear us. Fortunately, my friend, we have a whole Internet of people to listen. :)Well written.
Such a sad and powerful poem, Leo, something I suspect we've all felt before. I can definitely relate to the feeling of having no one to listen to my troubles. Of course we can always go to God in prayer, but sometimes we need another human to hear us. Fortunately, my friend, we have a whole Internet of people to listen. :)Well written.
Sad, image filled, rife with emotion and love. A lovely read though.
Sad, image filled, rife with emotion and love. A lovely read though.
@Saru,It ain't a paragraph, it's a verse! 🙂 and I'm glad you loved it!
@Saru,It ain't a paragraph, it's a verse! 🙂 and I'm glad you loved it!
@Gauthami,Thanks very much 😀
@Gauthami,Thanks very much 😀
@Anthony,Amen, and we do do that indeed!
@Anthony,Amen, and we do do that indeed!
@Natasha,Glad for a ear to listen, but at times, the paper is more of a friend than any other, isn't it? Glad you liked the write, though sad…!
@Natasha,Glad for a ear to listen, but at times, the paper is more of a friend than any other, isn't it? Glad you liked the write, though sad…!
@Patt,Thanks, and glad you loved the flow! 🙂
@Patt,Thanks, and glad you loved the flow! 🙂
@Chris G.,Yes, the biggest and most precious of journals, our hearts!
@Chris G.,Yes, the biggest and most precious of journals, our hearts!
@Brian, Very true! Writing does warm the heart! 🙂
@Brian, Very true! Writing does warm the heart! 🙂
@Lynne,Yeah, a writer's paper reflects the heart quite well, IMHO :)Thanks!
@Lynne,Yeah, a writer's paper reflects the heart quite well, IMHO :)Thanks!
@Lori,My paper is there, to pour my heart even if no one is there to listen… So I do have someone I think! Thanks! 🙂
@Lori,My paper is there, to pour my heart even if no one is there to listen… So I do have someone I think! Thanks! 🙂
@Ayala,Thanks! 🙂
@Ayala,Thanks! 🙂
@Maggie,Thanks a lot! 🙂
@Maggie,Thanks a lot! 🙂
@Ann LeFlore,Thanks and glad you found my piece to be fantastic! 🙂
@Ann LeFlore,Thanks and glad you found my piece to be fantastic! 🙂
@Bagya,It's a verse, not a para! Thanks! 🙂
@Bagya,It's a verse, not a para! Thanks! 🙂
@Nanka,It's a mixed ending actually.. Sad that not a ear I have to listen to me, but happy that my inkdrops of blood have a paper to shine on! 🙂 Glad you liked my opening verse, and thanks so much!
@Nanka,It's a mixed ending actually.. Sad that not a ear I have to listen to me, but happy that my inkdrops of blood have a paper to shine on! 🙂 Glad you liked my opening verse, and thanks so much!
@Pooja,Why not? What's different? 😀 I don't have MPD 🙂 Just a pen-name!
@Pooja,Why not? What's different? 😀 I don't have MPD 🙂 Just a pen-name!
@Raji,Thanks a lot 🙂 Glad you liked it!
@Raji,Thanks a lot 🙂 Glad you liked it!
@Traci,Yes, all of us have felt it at some time or another for sure! No one to listen..But writing is so much helpful to relieve our mind's burden too! 🙂 Thanks & glad you liked it!
@Traci,Yes, all of us have felt it at some time or another for sure! No one to listen..But writing is so much helpful to relieve our mind's burden too! 🙂 Thanks & glad you liked it!
@Daydreamer,Thanks and glad you felt it good! 🙂
@Daydreamer,Thanks and glad you felt it good! 🙂
wow…so profound. wonderful write!
wow…so profound. wonderful write!
This soul is touched by the things you write.http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/19/perfect-love/
This soul is touched by the things you write.http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/19/perfect-love/
The first stanza sucked me in like a twister and never let me down. Its so nice to see some really good stuff amidst the babble of the internet.
The first stanza sucked me in like a twister and never let me down. Its so nice to see some really good stuff amidst the babble of the internet.
"Although they are only breath, words which I command are immortal"~ SapphoThis is such a meaningful piece that articulates the beauty and passion behind the written word.
"Although they are only breath, words which I command are immortal"~ SapphoThis is such a meaningful piece that articulates the beauty and passion behind the written word.
I don't have anything else to say but u'r just mind blowing :))
I don't have anything else to say but u'r just mind blowing :))
very emotionally charged and profound wordplay.:)
very emotionally charged and profound wordplay.:)
A relief to be able to express our heart's desires and thoughts.
A relief to be able to express our heart's desires and thoughts.
Souls may not be listening with their ears, but they read your words with their heart…so moving…beautiful
Souls may not be listening with their ears, but they read your words with their heart…so moving…beautiful
loved it.. Those words are damn strong and its a wonder that you can put then to form these verses..!
loved it.. Those words are damn strong and its a wonder that you can put then to form these verses..!
Leo, This is such a strong wite. The last two lines are exquisite. Thank you for faithfully wordling with us each week. I love my stops here.Brenda
Leo, This is such a strong wite. The last two lines are exquisite. Thank you for faithfully wordling with us each week. I love my stops here.Brenda
Dear LeoThis is very lovely.. I enjoyed it so much…"Alas, I have not a soulTo listen to my sorrows;"Really enjoyed it…Shashiॐ नमः शिवायOm Namah Shivayahttp://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-wet-and-sandy-beach.htmlConnect with me At Twitter @VerseEveryDay
Dear LeoThis is very lovely.. I enjoyed it so much…"Alas, I have not a soulTo listen to my sorrows;"Really enjoyed it…Shashiॐ नमः शिवायOm Namah Shivayahttp://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-wet-and-sandy-beach.htmlConnect with me At Twitter @VerseEveryDay
@Hope,Thank you 🙂
@Hope,Thank you 🙂
@Charles,Thank you 🙂 Glad you liked it!
@Charles,Thank you 🙂 Glad you liked it!
@Umashankar,There are a lot many good writers out there! 🙂 Glad you felt I'm one of them, and for telling my poem didn't have a letdown!
@Umashankar,There are a lot many good writers out there! 🙂 Glad you felt I'm one of them, and for telling my poem didn't have a letdown!
@Kay,Thank you 🙂
@Kay,Thank you 🙂
@Niya,Thank you 🙂
@Niya,Thank you 🙂
@Morning,Thanks very much 🙂
@Morning,Thanks very much 🙂
@Clariice,Thanks 🙂 It is indeed, a relief!
@Clariice,Thanks 🙂 It is indeed, a relief!
@Krishnapriya,Yes, I wonder how I do it too! 🙂
@Krishnapriya,Yes, I wonder how I do it too! 🙂
@Susie,Yes, they read, and it is good to be known like that! 🙂 Thanks!
@Susie,Yes, they read, and it is good to be known like that! 🙂 Thanks!
@Brenda,Thank you 🙂 and it is a pleasure to be wordling along with you too!
@Brenda,Thank you 🙂 and it is a pleasure to be wordling along with you too!
@Shashi,Thank you 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it!
@Shashi,Thank you 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it!
Such an amazing post…revealing the bleeding heart…simply superb write…Thanks for share…
Such an amazing post…revealing the bleeding heart…simply superb write…Thanks for share…
Hello.Aah…sweet words indeed, Leo.Loved that last stanza.Nicely penned!Thanks for sharing.Bashful Lady
Hello.Aah…sweet words indeed, Leo.Loved that last stanza.Nicely penned!Thanks for sharing.Bashful Lady
I love the poem. You still write great! 🙂
I love the poem. You still write great! 🙂
indescribable except for "whoa", exceptionally done piece!
indescribable except for "whoa", exceptionally done piece!
beautiful rambling.keep it up.
beautiful rambling.keep it up.
Great poem. I loved the ending.
Great poem. I loved the ending.
Wow.I'm amazed. This is great poetry..
Wow.I'm amazed. This is great poetry..
Emotional words and very beautiful to read somehow for me a dance of a balance, I liked this.
Emotional words and very beautiful to read somehow for me a dance of a balance, I liked this.
i loved this poem esp the flow an dthe words just amazing.
i loved this poem esp the flow an dthe words just amazing.
Touching to the core ! Desperate hapless souls's plight in ur very effective n rhyming poetic verses !
Touching to the core ! Desperate hapless souls's plight in ur very effective n rhyming poetic verses !
A powerful and extremely touching piece of art, Leo…Beautiful!
A powerful and extremely touching piece of art, Leo…Beautiful!
so so touchy..
so so touchy..
so nice
so nice
Such poetic lines….
Thanks, Sreeja.. 🙂
– Leo.
This was one of the best I read of yours … enigmatic !!!
Thank you, GS. 🙂
– Leo.
What a brilliant poem! I can relate to these words very much. I was going to say what my favourite lines were, but having read it over again several times I really don’t think I can choose – every line is so good! 😀
I’m very new to blogging and I am not sure what the rules are on reblogging (if there are any), especially when it comes original writing. Would you mind if I reblogged this?
Hi Suzy. Thank you for those kind words of praise for my poem, and feeling that each line was quite good 🙂 I’m glad you liked it.
I checked reblogging & how it works. I think that should be fine 🙂
Reblogged this on WordMusing.
Reblogged by Suzy
a very very late compliment. but i liked this one.
Thanks, Manju. 🙂
Simply beautiful. 🙂
Thank you, Nomzi. 🙂