lost to these sorrows, my mind,
I have to embrace this pain,
in them, my true friend I find.
how to surrender, to pain;
she, my trusted guide, and blind
I shall follow, trusting pain.
when forgotten, she reminds,
how obsessed I am with pain
and slashes my throat, how kind.
mutely gasp, enjoy this pain,
she lives in me, gloom rewinds;
how wonderful is this pain.
her touch, like cold steel, I find,
excites me, I wait for pain
as her nails claw, with ropes bind.
viable for growth, this pain,
she makes me slay joys once lined
her lips curl, I writhe in pain.
dead to obsessions, L’s mind
living, yet dead, with this pain.
One Single Impression , Three Word Wednesday
Β© Leo (20th August, 2011)
This is a remarkable different view to pain. Embrassing and coming to terms with pain is enduring through it.
Something I have not quite been able to do.
in them, my true friend I find.
how to surrender, to pain;
she, my trusted guide, and blind
I shall follow, trusting pain.
when forgotten, she reminds,
how obsessed I am with pain
Seems in your poem you are at the point of laughing at pain. Been there myself. Pain is an entity onto itself whether physical or emotional. I hope I understood this correctly. Being able to feel, even if it is pain, it is still a feeling. Very complex poem. Thank you for posting and having me stop to think about this.
I can’t laugh at pain, though it does come to a stage where I do feel like doing so. Maybe I can laugh with her.. Thank you for liking it and stopping by after your thoughts!
Pain indeed is very complex…and you express it most beautifully Leo….
Especially loved the last line.. “Living, yet dead, with this pain”
Pain is never simple! Thank you, Tweety.
many levels of pain here, not just the physical kind
Thanks, Christine!
Having myself tasted this Fiend
I can appreciate your Pain
Good Lines, Vinay!
Thanks, Saras..!
I still haven’t been able to really come to terms with my own personal pain since the last one year…maybe someday…but I don’t think I will ever be able to properly.
Wonderfully written…but I don’t think the reason behind writing this is at all wonderful.
Thanks, Antara! Pain takes time to get on terms with. I can understand!
I could feel your struggle to pain and befriending pain…
I guess it is much better embracing pain than struggling to veer away with pain…
Life is…seasoned with so much pain!
Very nice rendition Leo, I wished this is not you! Just words that flowed in your heart and mind…
Thank you, Aame! π
I live with this pain each and everyday. Some of it done by others, some of it by myself. Sometimes the depression leaves you with so many things that u really don’t know anything anymore.
Yes, pain gets that effect on me too, Chim. Thanks.
You’ve captured the essence of obsession, esp. with pain or negativity!
Thanks Diva! π
Masochistic…Dard bhari ghazal Leo filled with sadistic pleasures, π
Rongte khade kar diye tumhne, Dilko dhukha diya π
but I like the ending lines,
man ko zinda rakha hai phir bhi, mara pada hoon maine π
You have experimented well with this self inflicting and self destructing emotion in your attempt at an English Ghazal!! π
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Yeah.. mind is awake, yet I feel dead within.. Thanks Nanka! π
What a powerful poem Leo…each verse is emotional and deep. Nicely written.
Thank you, Write Girl π
SO powerful, Leo! and how often does it seem pain is required for us to grow? is it really? i don’t know, but that’s the way my growth has happened. this is stunning! β₯
Yes, pain is essential to grow, and it is needed to not let pain taken negatively. Patience isn’t everyone’s virtue I know, but I feel it should be.. π Thanks Dani.
pain is a part of the journey…i think some of my greatest growths have comes from it..a little scary when you long for the pain though…smiles. ghazal?
Yes, Brian, pain does help in growth π And I think it’d be more appropriately called “attempt at ghazal”? π
Yeah pain is a part of life, great things can come from it, not always but usually. Wonderful rhyme play too.
Thanks, Pat π
I agree with TheMsLvh’s comment above. Pain has so many shades and levels and your poem managed to condense all of that into beautiful lines. Thank you.
Thank yu, Elle π
I like this: “and slashes my throat, how kind”
Yes, it sort of comes true at times too, SHP.
I read this and thought of a song I want to share with you… Those will be my words for your amazing heart felt poem.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GMZhPvCBCCs&feature=youtube_gdata_player
Thank you, I will watch it now, ~L π
People I’ve known who have suffered long-term pain have told me that the only way in the end, is to surrender to it. I am sure that’s wisdom, and I hope I never acquire it at first-hand.
Yes.. I hope you never do, Rosemary!
this is so intense Vinay it almost leaves me speechless, my gosh how you come up with this stuff amazes me!
Just writing from my heart does the trick as always, Amanda π Thanks!