And the sign read… “Heaven”
He saw God approach him. But he was a mobster. Surely he didn’t deserve this.
“You’ll be given another chance”, God spoke.
He awoke with a start.
“I’ll be good now”, he thought.
He went downstairs, opened the door; only to step into an ambush.
And the sign read… “Hell”
For Saturday Centus‘ 62nd week and Friday Flash 55.
© Leo 09/July/2011
Wow! Another very unique and spine-tingling take on “the sign”! Very good!
Glad you found it unique and spine-tingling, Becky. 🙂
Drag to be him!
Well done.
=)
For sure, Sue. Poor fella didn’t stand a chance 😉 Thanks for liking.
Ooh, now that’s some sign! Good one 🙂
Yeah. Some sign that! 😉 Thanks Deborah.
This is very strong writing. Excellent!
Thanks, JFB 🙂 Glad you liked.
So dark the con of man
(of course meant in a slightly different way than Brown wrote…you know, excepting the priests and femininity and all that jazz)
Wonderful 55er. Very poignant, like a 55er should be. 🙂
Glad you liked it. Thank you, Antara 🙂
Bummer! He should have stayed in bed!! Great take on the prompt!
Yeah, it’d have been better for him I guess 😉 Thanks Judie.
They do say that crime doesn’t pay…
I guess ‘they’ are right!
Yeah. Guess so, June 🙂 Thank you for the comment.
ha! interesting twist!
Thanks Jo 🙂
And “hell” it should be for his kind! This nicely worded and compact. I like it a lot.
Namaste……….cj
Glad you liked it, CJ. 🙂 Namaste to you as well.
As I read the last line…I laugh…very clever verse.
Thank you very much, Martin 😀
great tale of karma at its best!
Yeah. It caught up with him in the end, Dani.
😀 Who said, God didn’t have a sense of humor?
Cleverly done!
Well, I think the mobster might say that now, Becca. Thank you 🙂
Strong few words !
Thanks, Ms. Nobody 🙂
WHOOPS!!!! There we go thinking we know what’s coming next. Nice work, keep it up!!
Yep. It never happens what we expect, does it, Mignonne? 🙂 Thanks very much.
God has his ways.. ha, ha,
that’s perhaps
the only place where
it is tit for tat..
Leo this is beautiful… and today you made my day by being the first to congratulate me on my 300th..
Yeah.. He certainly does, Rameshji 🙂 Thank you, and it was an unexpected honor to be the first to wish you.
Totally unexpected! Loved it!
Thanks, Clariice. 🙂
wow. that was brilliant. I mean, honestly, I’m speechless, and that doesn’t happen often.
🙂 I’m glad you found it brilliant, Donna 🙂
This is awesome Leo, really enjoyed it
Thanks, mindlovemisery 🙂 Glad you liked it.
Thought I had noted this Leo but, now I came back for another read I see that I don’t think I did.
I love it that God has a sense of humour, too. Who is to say that he doesn’t. He made us, after all….lol
Thanks, Daydreamer. He did make us indeed. Loads of humor when it came to me I feel 😉 Hehehe 😆
Oops! But oh yes so cleverly written!
Thanks a lot, Karen 🙂
Leo….
Loved your 55 My Friend.
Thanks for playing, you got more comments than I did!
Oh thanks, G-man. And no no.. I got lesser comments than you did 😀 It counts more because I reply to all comments. LOL 😆
excellent 55 leo..
Someone is Special
Thank you, SiS 🙂
That was perfect.
Thanks, Christine. 🙂
An unexpected ending!
Thanks, Tilly 🙂
wow! that was clever! unexpected ending …
Cheers!
http://vj-menon.blogspot.com/
Thanks, Vijay. 🙂
Oh makes you want to go back to bed! ~Ames
Yawn…! I’m sleepy still, Ames. Thanks!
Geez. This was great. For some reason I felt like there would be the punchline to a joke, so the ending really surprised me.
Love the terse writing style here. Really tight!
Thanks for sharing.
🙂 Thanks a lot, Jenny. The Centus prompt really brought the post to life actually. 🙂
Gosh. You have some imagination! And when it turns grim, God save the reader. 😀
I loved this piece!
Yeah 😀 God save my readers.. I dont want them to run away 😉 Thanks, Deboshree 😀