Un(Hitched)

Life is hard when you’ve to follow in someone else’s footsteps. I know lots of people have been successful in things before me, but to compare my steps in theirs is an injustice. After all, I can be just walking now, but trying to get into my stride. Why cast doubts, judge me by my cover before I even get to the middle? Thankfully, I’m not affected much by that now. My sight is set. And cloud nine is a little less for me.

I share this post with OSI, where the topic is Crater and Sunday Scribblings, where the topic is Hitch.


In some eyes
I am imperfect
Living my life
Hitched to it
In their opinion
By few hands
Never to reach
High heights
Set by people
Once my allies
Long before me

But miles away
From the chain
From a crater
Formed by lava
Of their heated
Unappreciative
Glazed glance
My aims are set
Not just to get
To the heights
But to get past

If only they see
But perhaps its
Better if they
Never ever do


© Leo 02/July/2011

Poetry & writing to me are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.

44 thoughts on “Un(Hitched)

  1. Hmm like forging your own path..high up there in the mountains..in some ways it may run parallel to the ones taken before but it’s new…interesting shift at then end..I wonder if in some ways we need even disapproving people to see where we’re at..Jae

    • Very much so, Jae. Why go with someone’s stride when you can try to go longer? Yes, even some negative vibe is needed to emphasize on our positive.

  2. I really like this! It is so true that others can dash our dreams and discourage us from seeking them. Sometimes it’s better to go the way with them and look for help and strength from within and from those who do believe in us.

    Lee
    Tossing It Out

    • I’ve lots of those “others” that you talk about, Lee. But I just walk with them, and not hear them completely. Glad you really liked it. 🙂

  3. We are successful only in our eyes. If we have set out to accomplish something, and we do accomplish it, no matter the hoots and hollers from the cool crowd, we are successful. I like how you put something of yours which is very personal before each poem you post. It gives the reader a little more insight of who you are and why you write. I like that, I really do. I;m tempted to take up the practice, but heck, I’m too old to start that now, should’ve do it years ago.

    • True that. If we didn’t know we were right, then the other’s words will only deter us. Thank you, Jerry. I write those words, because it is what keeps me frustrated or happy or gifts me those emotions that spur my poetry. I think if you want to, you can start. I read somewhere, it is never too late to be the person you wanted to be. Why keep age as factor in the post then, eh? 🙂 Anyways, in the end, it is your wish after all 😀

  4. how is it possible that i like your poems better and BETTER each time??? 🙂
    this one is just awesome. sometimes i fear the same thing- following others, i might lose the thing unique to my own. it sucks when others(specially ppl who barely know you) form opinions about me. i specially loved the line “Of their heated Unappreciative Glazed glance” it is so chilling yet true at the same time.
    i could totally relate to this Leo. lovely poem 🙂

    • I don’t know how that happens, Kirti. Maybe you are in a very good mood when that happens? 😉 Glad you liked it, and hope you don’t get too much of negative others around you. 🙂

      • no Leo… i think its the way you write… 🙂 🙂 and ummm.. i do get a lot of negative but i try and put a deaf ear to it. sometimes i succeed, sometimes i dont 🙁

        • Oh. I’ll try and keep that way going then, Kirti. Glad you like it, and I hope you don’t find much negativity in the future then. Some is needed, for then only you can grow toward the positive 🙂

  5. I agree with you. It is “better if they never do”.
    Dreaming someone else’s dream is hard. People always judge. But one must turn a blind eye to them and keep walking.
    I don’t say that I have mastered this skill but that’s what I am aiming at.

    Well written 🙂

    • Yes. Very much better if they never find out my sight, for they might become more hard obstacles then. Thanks for the appreciation, Chhavi 🙂

  6. But miles away
    From the chain
    From a crater
    Formed by lava
    Of their heated
    Unappreciative
    Glazed glance
    My aims are set
    Not just to get
    To the heights
    But to get past

    • I like that very much! 🙂
  7. Curiously I never saw the allegory in this but happily read it straight as if the mountains were humanised, which is one of my favourite ploys.

  8. Leo, I believe we are all perfect at the time we TRY. It may not seem perfect in the eyes of others, but most of them don’t do anything creative anyway, or are slaves to that which they have seen before. They hide behind Emily D. and Keats and don’t want to be challenged.

    As for me, I loved this poem. It was self-effacing, yet it held an underlying confidence. Keep the faith and keep WRITING! Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/07/03/hitch-in-praise-of-alfred-hitchcock/

    • Exactly. It is so frustrating when we are expected to be someone who once was, maybe still is. I find comparisons quite sad when it comes in a negative manner. Glad you loved it, and felt the underlying confidence. Thank you Amy, for you also have got some thoughts out which I’ve worded in haiku.

  9. What a delightful feeling it is to surpass others’ expectations…and then not to let them know. I see it all so clearly in this masterful piece.

    • Yes, it is.. Not every “other” is an obstacle to our dreams. To not let those who are obstacles and weights on us, that is very much delightful, Lilibeth. Glad you liked it..

  10. Hi Leo, enjoyed how you depicted ‘self’.
    I am curious though on the last line –
    But perhaps its
    Better if they
    Never ever do

    Does it mean the eyes of others doesnt matter anymore?

    • Thank you, Clariice. It is who I am, with my goals quite set.

      No.. not all “others” are negative to your path and try to hold you back in their eyes. Sometimes it works too. For those eyes, I feel it is better that our true sight remains hidden, so that they do not form obstacles to their realization some day.

  11. Really love the look of your site. 😉 Your restraint with words here is impressive – you make the words work for you and not the other way around. Seems you have some very intelligent poetry.

    • I hope the love for the look stays, coz its brand new, and I just changed the background to a brighter one, Fountains 🙂 Glad you liked my restraint and I am happy to hear the words work! Thanks so much for the wonderful words of support! 🙂

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