Longing

Spring breeze refreshes
Stale minds; slaves of misfortune
Long to breathe fresh air


Shared at OSI and Haiku Heights.

Image from HERE


© Leo 13/06/2011

Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.

  

16 thoughts on “Longing

  1. You took this a different route that your first line suggested, and good for you for doing the unexpected. This is one of the best senryu’s I’ve come across because it is, first of all, misdirected and because of that misdirection it takes on a whole ‘nother feel. Excellent!


    @Jerry: Yes of course; I read somewhere the two parts of a haiku or senryu should be contradictory. I usually don’t push that point through, but did here, and glad you liked it. Thank you 🙂

  2. I like spring too. It indeed refreshes the mind and makes one more clear-headed and hopeful.
    This is especially so in early spring after the long wintry days..


    @Clariice: Well, spring is always tempting 🙂 Thanks and glad you liked it.

  3. This line really caused me to pause “Stale minds; slaves of misfortune.” Based on the photo, I am assuming that these are prisoners. A thought provoking haiku Leo.


    @WriteGirl: Thanks! It can mean both prisoners, or even just a mind enslaved by heated thoughts after bad luck I think 🙂

  4. Oh I so badly need some fresh breeze…you know 😀
    But thank God I am no slave of misfortune 😉
    I just want some fresh air to clear my stale mind! Huh? 😛

    Short and deep!


    @Amity: I think you have a beach nearby na? Go there and enjoy. Why you worrying for air now? 😛 😉

  5. That picture is exquisite: I love the way it represents being jailed but with such a fantastic view outside. It’s like having a dream so close at hand but not close enough to touch. The words fit wonderfully Leo!


    @Deboshree: It gives a perspective I think. A longing for freedom. That dream is exactly what I wanted to convey. Thank you! 🙂

  6. Leo I can feel that breeze, here the rustle of the fronds in the palm tree and hope that I am not one with a stale mind! LOL!


    @Amanda: You? 😮 Stale mind? No ways! 😆 But glad you could feel the breeze through my words! Thank you!

  7. We let fortune enslave us and thus became slaves of misfortune too.

    You really do write wonderful Haiku poems 🙂


    @Antara: Thanks! 😉 What you said first is so true! Not that sure of the second line though 😆

  8. Wow, that was wonderful, that’s exactly why I go out for a walk after sitting for hours in front of my laptop.


    @AA: Likewise here 🙂 Its stuffy sitting in front of the system for long intervals otherwise!

  9. Yes, unfortunate are those who are denied fresh air.


    @Harshad: Right! 🙂 But it gives a longing for it I think! Makes it better when we get it finally!

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