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“Will he ever come back?”
She caressed my skin, as a tear slid down her eye. I was dead, nearly; a parting gift, unwanted. My half-sister was there when my seed was sown. She watched him plant me; not knowing he would walk away.
“Sleep, for the world won’t accept.”
The other day, I lived.
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Also shared at Friday Flash 55.
© Leo 11/06/2011
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
sends shivers
@Paulami: Yes I know..
certainly packed with a lot of emotion…unwanted is not a great feeling at all…
@Brian: Yes, not great.. but the feeling is forced on those unfortunate victims…
Very heavy 55. Sad and intriguing.
Here’s my 55: Friday Flash 55 ~ Repeat Echo
@ChefKar: Thanks! It is sad, I know.. I’ll come by your 55 a bit l8r.. 🙂
Leo…?
Whats with this screen?
I can’t read this script.
Your 55 was very intense and Most Excellent.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
@G-man: What couldn’t you read? I didn’t follow.. Glad you found my 55 intense and excellent 🙂 Thanks and have a good weekend too!
something very other worldly about this one, Leo… nicely written, albeit tad sad .. .
@Kavi: Maybe, but it all happens in this world to begin with. Thanks!
Leo.. Just 55 words but you said so much in this.. Love your 55… All The Best.. Wanna know what happened the other day?
Someone is Special
@SiS: Glad you liked it. Will come by yours soon!
Excellent, emotionall-effective.
@Steve: Thanks!
Sown to rise again?
@MonkeyMan: Depends on the one the gift is given to, but more often than not, it is ended never to rise again..
very interesting
@VP Ahmed: Thanks!
Short and yet unbelievable content, emotions to be exact. Very nice!
Sureindran – The Other Day
@Sureindran: Thanks! 🙂 Glad you liked it.
very intense… though i found it to be a bit too short as I am more used to a lengthy description! but very good!
ATB for BAT!
@Aashish: I’m usually addicted to length too.. but decided to change gears for once 😀
Brrr…….this was frightening. Powerful. Atomic. Best of all Luck 🙂
@Shilpa: Thanks! All the best to you too! 🙂
Captivating.. all the best for BAT.. 🙂
@Rinaya: Thanks! 🙂
Excellent Write Up 🙂
@Creativity: Thanks! 🙂
So poignant Leo! A heart-breaking 55’er!
You see, many things could really happen in a day!
Like, I wish to write an entry for BAT the other day
but for some unknown reasons, I failed!
Is the submission over now?
@Amity: Yes, it is. You could have participated too 😛 Hmm. No matter, maybe next time. Thanks for liking the 55 fiction.
To be frank, I didn’t understand at all. 🙁 might be I’m dumb. 😥
@Nethra: Nah 🙂 I just went a little too deep for you I guess.
Being unwanted – few things could be worse.
A unique way of saying it Leo.
@Deboshree: Yes, very true! Thanks! 🙂
Wow. This was stupendously good. Very cleverly written, I must say. Awesome. 😀
@D2: Thanks! 🙂
Intensity at its best.
@Enchanta: Thanks!
It sounds sad and filled with emotions..
but somehow I couldnt see the picture..can you shed some light on this particular inspiration?
@Clariice: Yes, I know. Very deep from me this time. And I couldn’t find an image to ease the reader either. I thought this from two views…
1: An unborn child, gifted to a raped woman, the lover running away. The girl strokes her belly, as she thinks of him. The half sister can be another child nearby; and the woman asks the baby to sleep (a final sleep), for the world will not accept the baby in right sense.
2: A rose, given to a girl, on her break up day. She strokes the petals of the rose, from her garden, which he had planted. She tells herself to sleep, and consoles herself its for the best, for the world would not have accepted their relationship. The last line of course, is from the rose’s voice, so once plucked, the rose, once lived now is dead.
🙁 ..Went over my head ..miles away from me!
@Aativas: No issues 🙂 Not for everyone I guess. Thanks for stopping by.
I had to read it twice, to comprehend. Must say, bold subject, well expressed. Leaves a void at the end of the post..
ATB for Bataom-21
@Viyoma: Thanks! The void is natural, for it makes such a difference if it is not there! But what happens is cyclic, unfortunately!
Nice…the best story is when a person can derive his/her own meaning from it…
@Catabolism: Thanks! I think that is right too. 🙂
Deep certainly… raw emotion. can go with everything, the other day…
ATB
Though choice to make— wife or Peace of mind…
Find out what happened – The Other Day on my blog -THE SILENT WORDS
@Nikhil: Thank you very much 😉 WIll come by to see how you dealt with your predicament soon 😀 🙂
Brilliant post ..Very clever writing ..ATB for BAT
@Mugdha: Thanks very much and wish you the same! 🙂
i need a scribe to understand …
bit tough for a half beaked writers/readers like me ….
🙂 🙂 🙂
@Mahesh: Hehehe! I know I went a little too deep this time! Thanks for stopping by!
“Sleep, for the world won’t accept.”…………………………. beautiful…..awesome….powerful……this is emotional and strikes depths
@Raja: Thank you 🙂 Glad you liked it.
Thank you all for appreciating my post! 🙂