Unforgiven

There was anger in his eyes. I could see the fire burning every time I looked into them. He used to be in that same spot; I sometimes gave him a dime. If only I saw some remorse…

“Won’t you ever forgive me?” he would ask.

My reply was always the same.

“No, father… ”


Shared at Friday Flash 55, inspired by image given at Thursday Tales

Image from DeviantArt, ©Brutalster.


© Leo 03/06/2011

Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.

  

27 thoughts on “Unforgiven

  1. The person holding the grudge and chooses not to forgive carries a burden as well..Only when choosing to let go then will life seem much happier and lighter..


    @Clariice: Yes, a burden is there perhaps. But forgiveness for everything is not possible at times either. We cannot let go of somethings.

  2. But why? It must be because of a sad past that has something to do with his father?

    Short and touching!


    @Amity: Yes, a sad past that has a lot to do with his father..!

  3. Leo…
    Each week you bless us with a moving story.
    You are complex yet obvious.
    Fantastic 55 My Friend.
    Thank You for your wonderful support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End


    @G-Man: Each week, I just try to be myself 🙂 Don’t know if I’m complex or obvious though 🙂 Thanks for a lovely meme to be part of too.

  4. Aaahhhh…. Nice one 🙂 Let me think of the various possibilities… The father had killed his mother… 😉 Wassay ??? 😀


    @Chhavi: Yeah.. that most certainly can be one 🙂 Glad you liked it, and it made you think 😉

  5. I know of people who have that type of relationship with a parent. Awesome 55.


    @Monkeyman: Yes, a lot of people, unfortunately! Glad you liked my 55er!

  6. That was so moving!
    That look, those eyes are definitely aching, you captured it solemnly in your few words.


    @AA: Ya, it is aching for some forgiveness, but one that might never cme..!

  7. First, the image is haunting..I can just see his eyes talking to me!
    Secondly, your words and story theme, simply amazing!
    I can never be a part of TT, as I am so engrossed in writing rhymes..but after seeing this, I feel I should give it a try!

    P.S I am contesting for Indiblogger-Yahoo-Dove ‘what real beauty means to you’ blogging contest. Can you read my post at http://t.co/2Z5RHqU and if you like it, ‘LIKE’ it on Facebook or ‘Tweet’ it or even sign up with Indiblogger to promote my post? The instructions to sign up with Indiblogger are given at the end of my post itself. Hoping to see you there! If you are on Indiblogger, you already know what to do!!


    @Fiducia: If you feel you are better off only doing rhymes, then stick to it 🙂 However, like you mentioned in that other comment, a bit of change doesn’t hurt 😉 Glad you liked it and thank you for the appreciation..

  8. Well done. You’ve told the bare bones of a story and left each of us to flesh it out as we will. Perfect choice of photo to illustrate.


    @Lisa: Yes, sometimes, leaving some part for the reader to imagine is quite nice 🙂 Thanks for the appreciation!

  9. fabulous 55.

    the eyes in him are sharp and showcase his anger powerfully.

    Happy Monday.

    🙂


    @Jingle: Thanks, glad I could get that anger out through my words! 🙂

  10. Loved this one so many of us have been in this place before. The picture has very haunting eyes BTW!


    @Amanda: Yes, it is the story of many, but not one to narrate so often isn’t it? Glad you liked it. The picture is all credits to the artist there. Without it, some essence will be missing!

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