But this silence, it embraces my letter,
I lift my quill, in my mind, forget the ink.
Your pain I share, yet it cannot feel better,
For the arrows I shot, wounded deep I think;
But this silence, it tightens the past fetters,
Revives memories unwanted in a wink.
If love can kill, unforgotten remains this,
Nothing is deadlier; than that final kiss.
Shared at One Shot, Form Monday and Poets Rally.
Image from HERE
Β© Leo 01/06/2011
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing to me are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
The last line conveys very strong emotions…really enjoyed the poem.
@Martin: I wanted to convey that in the line, yes! Glad you enjoyed the poem! π
Whoa on this line!
‘I lift my quill, in my mind, forget the ink’
Very captivating image, yet apt. Powerful write. π
@Dheepi: Thanks very much! Glad you liked it and felt a line to be memorable in it as well π Cheers!
Excellent Poem, I felt every word and the image does it mad justice.
@Blaque: Thank you! π Glad you liked it and found it to be excellent!
Yes very strong emotions, excellent poem.
@Pandamonium Cat: Thanks! Glad you liked! π
Wow! Leo, such passion and the close is a stunner. Nice work.
Later..
@Jamie: Thank you very much! Later! π
It’s an amazing coincidence cuz just last night, I watched a Perry Mason movie with the EXACT same theme.. only, it was literally deadly!
Well penned, L.. I am only hoping this was fiction..
@Kavi: It isn’t completely fiction. Glad you liked it.! I’ve read almost all Perry Mason books! He’s one of my favorite crimesolvers! π
very cool, strong. I dig it.
@Jesse: Glad you dig it! π
Right through the heart:
“If love can kill, unforgotten remains this,
Nothing is deadlier; than that final kiss.”
Great poem. Thank you for sharing.
@KnightsHeart: Glad you liked the ending couplet! π
fabulous
@Trumble: Thanks! π
last kiss…makes me shiver in its finality
@Brian: Makes me shiver too…
This one is wonderful! I’m truly blown away. Every single line was just so wonderful!
@Antara: Thank you! Glad you liked every line! π
Wow your words really make one think
With a nudge and a wink
As that last line rings true
For the last kiss is more deadly than one that is new
Bringing about a longing that won’t go away
At least until a far off day
Enjoyed the poem
As I came to roam
@Pat Hatt: Thank you. Glad you liked the poem that I’ve written here! And I do like the reply you’ve given too!
Even when you write in silence the result is so amazing! I hope your silence is read!
@Seabell: My thoughts are more focused when I’m silent, but my silence doesn’t matter to many.
Touching! Good poem!
@Ina: Glad you felt so!
ooooh, how very ominous…
@Lori: Yes, that last kiss always is..
beautiful write… I always wonder how you express emotions so well…
totally loved this one…
@Raji: Glad you loved it. Even I wonder if I really do express the emotions well..
Short but sweet. Intense words. Adoration for you, amazing poem.
x LM x
@Leah: Thanks very much, for the adoration! Glad you liked it.
Once again you have constructed a strong poem to convey an emotion that is hard to explain. I’m in awe of how flexible your pen can be.
“For the arrows I shot, wounded deep I think”
Simply, wow.
@McGee: Thank you. Glad you felt the emotions involved with the poem, and felt my pen to be flexible!
nothing is deadlier than that final kiss. damn! that made me feel nostalgic. i felt the pain and the sorrow. nicely done!
@Julian: Yes, nothing is deadlier. Very true, and makes me nostalgic too.
Its nice. I like surprise endings, and keeping the personal influences (if you might had any) aside, I think the poem delivers its winner at the end.
Cheers!
@Mihir: I’ve had a personal influence, yes.. and glad you felt the end to be winning.
Goodness, I could almost feel your heartache.
There’s no pain that hurts as deep as a last goodbye, for whatever the reason.
Beautiful writing!
@Daydreamertoo: Thanks! Yes, no deeper pain. That is very true!
You have a very romantic way of writing, I love it. ‘I lift my quill, in my mind, forget the ink.’ Brilliant! It’s hard-hitting, but beneath it all lies veiled hurt. That’s what I get from this π
@mypastmademe: Glad you felt my way of writing is romantic. Thanks! π Veiled hurt, yes. You are right. ..
Last kiss…so final and romantic.
@Ayala: Thank you! Glad you liked it.
Ouch… I hope not.
@Patricia: ah, neither do I.. but it is what happens mostly! π
wow. hot.
when true love between two persons happen, that’s what they do…you are still young, right at the perfect stage.
bless you.
Happy Rally.
π
@Jingle: been there, had that. π God bless you too! π Happy Rally dear.
Very strong emotions,
Wonderful Leo.
@Meiro: Thank you very much! Glad you liked it..
Oh the aftermath of a couples quarll can leave a stillness that chills the bone. Where hope caves in and a whole can begin to grow. This was great you explained with depth, the bitterness of this a fights aftermath, and remorse of ever having it. Hope things go well. Have a great Rally
No feeling is without cause,
Shoeless
@ShoelessBoyWonder: Yes, you’re right. Hopes fall in, voids begin growing.. That’s all so true.. Glad you liked my poem, and have a wonderful Rally as well..!
The silence, the feelings, the last kiss … brilliant mixture of words and amazing poetry as always Leo! Hugs!
@Blaga: Thanks! Glad you liked it..
That touched a chord. Several in fact.
Splendid work.
@Deboshree: Yeah, it would. Its something that happens a lot of times I guess!
the last kiss is always the end of everything, and all u left with is the silence…of the memories that was…great poem.
my link:http://mypoetrywriting.blogspot.com/2011/05/his-coming-is-near-upon-shores-off-each.html
@Chim: Yes, the end of everything! Very sad too, those memories.. Silence and sadness, they just don’t go together..
heartfelt… thanks, so expressive, a conscience prick reminder and a heart pauser of a poem. :] xx
@Catie: Thank you very much..! Glad you liked it! π
Dark and moving… Silence brings the mysterious uncertain atmosphere. Great poem!
@Magda: Yes, it does that most certainly! Glad you liked it..
Beautiful expressed with such words π amazing.
@Riika: Thank you π
You are a true wordsmith. Magnificent poem.
@Andy: Thank you for the praise π Glad you liked it.
Stirring
Well done
Genebrother
@Genebrother: Thank you π
so so true π
@Dancingfreak: Yeah! π
Surely impressive! The deadly blow! wow..
Puplumages is Purvi π
I am from ~
http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2011/05/27/laments-on-the-loss-of-love/
@Purvi: I know where you’re from π I visit there a lot. Glad you liked my poem! π
This is just so touching.And yes,”nothing is deadlier than that final kiss”. Amazing how you’ve managed to put these bitter-sweet sensations in to perfect harmony within your words….Lovely indeed.
@CareFreeWanderer: Glad you liked it. π I am glad to have put my emotions to words in a right way. Thank you!
Very nicely done. What a wonderfully written piece. The emotion is powerful, bare for all to see. The picture is a very nice accompaniment. Thanks for sharing π
@Fred: Yes, it is bared for all to see, the emotion. Glad you liked it, and found it well written π
A big WOW Leo, this poem left me breathless…
@Sam: What a coincidence, it had the same effect on me too π π Glad you liked it!
the “but” is indeed very strong.
@Paulami: Glad you liked my poem π Thank you.
Well penned this deep emotion! Very beautifully done! Cindy
@Cindy: Thank you very much. Glad you liked it π
sometimes it feels like that, does it not?
@Luna: Yeah, it most certainly does!
Wow, so much emotion in here. Beautiful.
@Teri: Thank you very much π
Beautifully written … the last kiss sears one’s memory!
@Becca: Yes, it certainly does! π
Hello Leo.
This is so sad. You write of love and love lost very well. This line is striking “I lift my quill, in my mind, forget the ink.”
Well done!
(Thank you for the kind words)
@Andy: Thank you for returning the visit and liking my poem as well π
So bittersweet and passionate. Hopefully, it’s not the final kiss!
@TheReasonYouCome: Hopefully, that is the case π
I love the intensity, incredible =)
@mindlovemisery: Thanks! π Glad you liked it.
There is that subtle shift of feelings, from being sad, to morose, to being vindictive…that final kiss!
@Amity: Not vindictive. Just a sad goodbye. Maybe the saddest…
and why it has to end that way? the photo shows a lovely couple not about to part with that kiss π
@Amity: The last kiss is the longest usually, coz the love of before will be trying to hold on for as long as it is possible!
a useless thought…last kiss longest? then why should they have to end things?
let the last kiss be the beginning of a better, happier relationship… π
just my opinion! π
@Amity: No, the thought is not useless. When you are truly in love, the love doesn’t want to let go. The final kiss to me is longest, as the love tries to rekindle itself. Sometimes the flames are reignited, sometimes not.
hmmmm….each to his own really… π
nice reaction you’ve made to my useless comment π
@Amity: Yes, I guess so..
Well done! So much sorrow expressed that rings true for any lost love. Thanks for sharing!
@Birchtreepastor: Yes. Lost love can be disgruntlinh and sad. Nothing more so than that!
I like the image you have with the prose. They fit together nicely and your choice of words
keep the image alive as the words are read!
@PoetryRoad: Glad you felt the image came alive through the words!
I feel a deep sense of loss and sadness. You did a fine job conveying it with your words.
@Peggy: Yes, sadness in the loss is definitely there!
so effective and strong with expression..
loved the theme.. !!
@Vignesh: Thanks! π
It felt bittersweet. But I still love it. π
@D: Thanks! It was bittersweet..
Strong and moving poem beautifully written.
@Tigerbrite: Thank you so much for finding the poem beautiful π
The longer the time away the sweeter is the kiss remembered.
@Dan: Yes, that is there too π
very true to life….a fine poem from your pen. thanks for sharing.
@Yelena: Thank you. It is in a way, true to my life too.
Beautiful expression of sadness combined with passion.
@Judith: Thanks! Glad you could feel the emotions involved! π
True Enough π
@iamjoross: Thanks! π
Wonderful images. Very nice work.
@Adelaide: Thank you so very much! π
Simply impressive ..
Here’s mine ..
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2011/05/23/satisfy-the-hunger-of-success/
@Ashbee: Thanks! π
Beautiful Poem!
@Dan: Thanks! π
Sweet going in but sour after the fact. Nicely done π
@JHPoetry: Yes, much like the fallen love for sure!
Very moving, and universal.
@Blitzken: Thanks! Glad you liked it! π
utterly riveting, each line built the rawness in the words….
@A.B. : Yes, coz it is from my heart I guess π Glad you felt it riveting!
So true, the last kiss. Your poem pierces the heart, and I love it for doing so. Thank you for sharing π
@Leonargo: Glad u liked it. π Yes, that last kiss is deadly! π