I remain on the shore
Safe from the torrid sea
A storm arrives soon
Its fury to rain upon me
Envious eyes on horizon
On brothers so far away
Surrendering to dreams
They live each new day
I remain on the shore
Alone, yearning a friend
Dreaming but not living
As I do days without end
I remain on the shore
Safe from the torrid sea
Not an adrift seafarer
Like I was meant to be
Shared at Sunday Scribblings and One Shoot Sunday
Photography given by One Shoot Sunday, © Fee Easton.
© Leo 15/05/2011
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing to me are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
The last stanza was inspiring..
And I feel a blend between this poem and the post on the Number 7!!
Nice..
@ Fiducia,
Thanks! 🙂
Oops.. Too many sea words to be seen here huh? 😉 Will try something else next 😀 Cheers!
sometimes we must risk it to atain those dreams and truly live…nice write leo
@ Brian,
So very true! 🙂 The risk is needed sometimes.
Wonderful flow..just like the sea..I wonder if remaining on the shore is being cautious..surrending to less than you might really want..Jae
@ Jae,
Perhaps the surrender is quite fine, but still, the yearning is always there I feel 🙂
“Dreaming but not living
As I do days without end”
Your poem, and those lines in particular, epitomize that beach anchored boat. You build a swift emotional flow with impact, Leo. And while there is that urge to journey against the notion of safety, there are also elements of envy and rage that seem external like the threat of storm. A very enjoyable, thought provoking poem.
@ Adam,
Yes, I found those lines to be my favorite too. Glad you felt the impact I wanted to give. Perhaps the elements of envy and rage can be of the storm also, now that I think of it. I was just intending to portray the rage and envy of the anchored boat! 🙂
“I remain on the shore
Safe from the torrid sea
Not an adrift seafarer
Like I was meant to be”
I feel the remorse here…
@ Patricia,
Yes, a remorse and a longing too..!
I love the last stanza especially.
He may be safe from the torrid sea, but not from his regrets.
What a wonderful way to interpret the picture.
@ Antara,
I couldn’t have shortened it better myself 🙂 Glad you liked it!
I love your poem. I think many of us have stood on that shore and felt like this at some point in our life. I’m standing there right now. Thank you.
@ Flying Monkey,
Ah, there are many who can relate to that feeling I think! Thank you!
I am amused by your soaring talent all of a sudden, your muses are back.
so many awesome poetry within recent few days, wow…
this one is very well done as well.
@ Jingle,
I’m glad too, but shhh, don’t let my muse listen in. She might run off 😉 Hehehe..!
Glad you felt it well done! Cheers!
Lovely…. Sometimes you have to go out to sea and find life awaiting 🙂
@ Ayala,
Very much true.. Life at shore can get a bit monotonous soon eh? 😉
Lovely…. Sometimes you have to go out to sea and find life awaiting 🙂
@ Ayala,
Very much true.. Life at shore can get a bit monotonous soon eh? 😉
Feels familiar. The choice to be safe instead of risk-taking. Nicely rendered.
@ Victoria,
Yes, but I think I could use a bit of the risk now.. too much safety is too dull I guess 😉
Sounds like you long for adventure…
@ Jinksy,
Oh for sure! 🙂 My life could use a little of that! 😀
Beautifully done, Vinay–such a feeling of yearning of not really wanting to be “ashore”.
@ Gayle,
Yeah, a ship is safe on the docks, but that wasn’t what it was built for! 🙂 I like that quote a lot, and it reminded me of that, so wrote it in relation with that 😀 Cheers!
Very nice prompt piece Leo, you provoke much thought about what it means to stand in safety or off in risk. I enjoyed the refrain with the change in the last thought. ~ Rose
@ Rose,
Thanks! 🙂 Glad you liked the prompt piece. It made me think what I wrote too, so was satisfying to see it get the appreciation..
Very thoughtful and honest response to the prompt. I certainly relate to the feelings you express.
@ Ann,
Thanks! 🙂 It was what I felt when I saw that photo of the boat. Glad it came out OK..!
Love the rhythm in this– like a boat rocking, like the ebb and flow of the tide. So lovely!
@ Kate,
Yeah, it has been a while since I tried a simple ABCB rhyme to a poem 🙂 Enjoyed writing it like the rocking of the boat too. Thanks!
Excellent poem off the photo prompt!
@ Martin,
Thanks! 🙂
To remain back, to feel an ocean’s separation from your destiny, torture. Cadence, rhyme and message pull together nicely here.
@ Kim,
Thanks! Yes, to remain back from destiny hurts like nothing else!
beautiful and sad. i truly felt for the one left behind.
@rmpWritings,
Yes, I too, felt for that lone boat on the shores of the great ocean..!
The words wash over you like the ocean’s waves. I like it.
@ Beespoetry,
Thanks very much 🙂
Ah, my fav. kind of Rhymping Poem. 😀 I feel all ocean-like and sitting-by-the-sea-moody. Beautiful… 😀
@ Deboshree,
Rhyming, I think? 😉 Glad you felt the wavy effect. Cheers!
Nice way to use surrender as acceptance of dreams.
Dream on! You will live as well!
@ Alive Always,
Yes, so true, in our dreams, we shall live and breathe free! Beautiful. Thanks for dropping by, a pleasure to have returned your visit to your thought provoking post.