Incomplete dreams wait
Fashioning into reality
Once, woven by threads
Nestled deep in mind
Long have the stitching
Yearned for unraveling
Impossible, they aren’t
Hard done by each tick
Against me, lost these
Desires seem within me
Talismanic, my dreams
Hiding themselves, an
Emergence they await
Trapped, in two words,
“If only”, my life passes
Momentarily its wishes
Etched in a sand grain
Written for
Thursday Poets Rally, Week 35 from 15th December to 21st December.
Image: From Google Images, source image file found from HERE
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
Beautiful words…and a great poem…
“Trapped, in two words,
“If only”, my life passes
Momentarily its wishes
Etched in a sand grain”
These lines I super-like… 🙂
thanks, Sumit.. glad u liked the poem.. and those particular lines..
Fantastic Write Up Leo!!
thanks Creativity 🙂
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Looks sad 🙁 and defeatism is acceptance of defeat without struggle 🙁 I hate those two words “if only”. 🙁 The best line here is “Impossible, they aren’t” 🙂 and incomplete dreams await to emerge into reality 🙂 and it can never be too late to start.
Best Wishes as always Leo!! 😀
yeah, I hate them too.. but it happens sometimes and that trapped feeling is terrible to have, Nanka 🙁 I’ll come out of it soon if I get trapped, thats for sure.. 😀
Brilliant! “If only I had the time”…yes that thought crosses my mind often.
Loved this verse:
“Hard done by each tick
Against me, lost these
Desires seem within me”
I know exactly how that feels… 🙂
yeah.. it crosses a lot of minds often, Deadpoet.. 🙂 glad u liked the poem 😀
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Very good Lines
Nice thoughts
Here’s mine poetry
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2010/12/10/love-is/
!! Happy Rally !!
thanks Ashbee 🙂
I totally enjoy “acrostiche’ and you do those so well. A message within a message…I do hope you take the time to make the dreams come true IF this is about you 🙂 (it rhymes lol)
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2010/12/16/onward-to-oblivion/
yeah.. a message within a message, it is a beautiful form of poetry for sure, Lynn 🙂 and it sort of can be related to by many na? It is sort of mine too, and hopefully, I can time it 🙂
only if we all had time…nice write
yes, Muted Poet.. if only…
If only I have the time,
smart acrostic, what a cute mixture of dreams and reality.
magical writing…
Thanks for sharing…
🙂
thank you Jingle. glad u liked it and it was a pleasure to share 🙂
Wow!! This was indeed a treat to read!
thanks very much, Thomas.. glad u liked the read 🙂
I especially like these lines:
Long have the stitching
Yearned for unraveling
Don’t we all just want to unravel some time?!
Thanks!
yes.. we all do want to at some time or another, Cloaked Monk 🙂 glad u liked it.
Once, woven by threads
Nestled deep in mind
Long have the stitching
Yearned for unraveling
An amazing write…took me to a point of deep reflection.
Thank you for sharing.
thank you very much, MereMortal 🙂 glad u liked the poem and that it made u reflect on it.
This poem is great!
Has so much…
And
Nicely composed
Kind of
Sensational.
wow.. an acrostic reply to my acrostic 😀 thanks Ina. glad u liked it and felt it great. 🙂
Beautiful Leo…If only…Sigh…So many dreams and our imaginations are a victim of this If only..
yep Tweety, lots of dreams are victimized for sure. glad u liked the poem.. 🙂
“If only” ain’t that the truth. So many thoughts cross my mind with that beginning. But this poems sets them free. Good job!
http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2010/12/16/you/
thanks, Marlee 🙂 glad u liked it and that u felt it was a poem that sets the thoughts free 😀
The last verse really summed it up well.
Great write.
thanks, Booguloo 🙂
Magial, beautiful work Leo.. As usual you are the best…………
–Someone is Special–
thanks SiS.
it’s lovely.. I like it
thank you Seoulaja 🙂
“trapped in two words–if only”
LOVE this.
Seriously amazing
yeah.. we all, at some time or the other, have been trapped in those two words, haven’t we Shea? 🙂 glad u liked the poem.
Being a fiber artist, I like your use of words.
thanks very much, athursdayschild 🙂
This is a strong poem. Great job I really like the line “Talismanic, my dreams
Hiding themselves, an Emergence they await”
thanks very much, Kristen 🙂
very beautiful
thank you, Glory 🙂
Amazing work!
thanks, TnL..
Lovely Poem
Like The Linkaging
Dreams……….. To Pursue ……………
If I only had Time …………………………..
If I Only had Timeeeeeeeeeeeee …………
thanks very much, Infiniterainbow. 🙂
Perfectly written, love your words and style as always=P
thanks as always, Riikz 😀
You captured the “If Only” so well. Marvelous write, Leo.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2010/12/17/where-are-you/
thanks very much, Tasi. glad u liked it, I will drop by soon. 🙂 I’m having a lot of pending reads at Rally already..
Wonderfully realised idea, loved it!
glad u liked it, Roy. thank you for stopping by.
ohmigawsh. How did you manage to write with my writing voice through the lens of my experience? Phenomenal, Leo. THANK YOU!
wow. you mean I thought at JJ level? gosh, I didn’t think I was even close to that 🙂 thanks Julie 😀 glad u liked it.
I love your creativity when it comes to the first letter of each line making a downward statement. talk about thinking outside the box, plus the last line is excellent. thanks for posting.
thank you very much, Shaun. glad you liked it and found it to be creative 🙂
If only…nice write.
thank you, Dasuntoucha 🙂 glad u liked it.
I love how you’ve made this childish structure so very adult.
thanks McGregor 🙂 glad u liked it.
I like the use of form here– interesting write!
thank u, Marilynn 🙂
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