Once He sent to earth,
A pretty princess in red,
To be cared by Mother,
In a nourishing soft bed.
From handsome princes,
She wished to choose,
A groom who’d love her,
Like morning to a dew.
First suitor soon arrived,
Made her blossom soon,
She began to love him,
Like stars to the moon.
Alas, it never happened,
In a trice, he was away,
But arrived, the second,
Scorching lonely days.
He possessed a warmth,
But she withered away,
But her prayer He heard,
And short was this stay.
For a breath of relief,
There remained no time,
With a shower of love,
Arrived the next in line.
All her scars of before,
He washed very quick,
His cool touch, she liked,
But even he didn’t stick.
With a strong icy breath,
He made her to shiver,
A white blanket, he gave,
No stop to her quivers.
No prince did stay long,
All wanted her as bride,
She died; reincarnated,
But still the princes tried.
She asked Him future,
A wedding was in store,
Soon she was betrothed,
Wife to the princes four.
Written for Thursday Poets’ Rally, Week 33, November 18th to 24th.
Wow! Now this was amazing! Did I say anything could be better?? Stunned!
You didn’t say it, Purvi đ glad you liked it and found it amazing đ
Now that Royal wedding season happens year after year and you have put it so well!! Excellent flow and the subtle humor, is so delicate and precise that according to me, it is a perfectly enjoyable and entertaining poem!! Would surely love to read more of these amazing ones again đ
yeah.. yearly wedding, that đ glad u liked it.. and found it entertaining…
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PS: I can’t believe you didn’t invite me!!! đ đ
ask the rose, its her wedding not mine, Rumz đ
ah. ok Knight Rumz.. welcome to the Royal Wedding.. the Princess Rose will be glad to have u around đ I’m just an attendee too.. glad u liked my description..!
she died,
the prince tried,
that’s what no one can hide…
sad story, beautifully told.
Thanks for the contribution to poets rally…
have fun! đ
its not a sad story, Ji đ its a seasonal wedding.. of a flower and the seasons đ
glad u liked the contribution.. and pleasure to write as always..
Oh this is simple beauty taken to virtual paper. I love it
thank u, Glory đ
Leo, this is too good, the way you penned down made me wonder how one can i write like this. I am impressed totally.. You are the best I ever read. Sure.. Happy Rally
Precious Gift
–Someone is Special–
Can’t stay away from this, this is something special from you.
–Someone is Special–
thank u, SiS..
thanks very much, SiS.. glad u liked the read and that it impressed you đ thanks also for the Perfect Poet nomination from your side..
Great poem, timely too!
thanks, Lisa đ
For a mo I thought it was about Kate and William and that creepy ring!
Beautifully written, vert tight and condensed.
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/11/18/dark-severance/
erm, no way, Jessica.. I’m not into that romantic mushy poetry much.. but this is a royal wedding that happens every year, every season đ glad u liked it đ
Great poem, love to attend this wedding each year with camera in hand makes for great pictures… again “Great” poem..
thank you, Scott.. đ yeah, it does indeed make great pictures.. the wedding..
I like your story poems, Leo. This one was nice and complicated, with quite an interesting ending, and your use of colors as symbols worked well. Nice one.
complicated? đ I thought the story of the seasons and the flower’s wedding was simple đ glad u liked it, Hedgewitch…
Wow beautifully written~ =D love the flow within the poem, happy rally^^
thank u, Riika.. đ happy Rally to you too…
Leo that poem is awesome!!!! It’s ever woman’s dream….to be married to someone who will wash away the pain and scars that she had by her man…
thank you very much, Haisley.. I was speaking metaphorically of course, with the princess in question being a red rose đ glad you could also relate in terms of a woman’s dream…
This was a nice read. This poem has such potential — and age old story with a new twist.
thanks very much, Amias đ
You were referring to four seasons and flower, weren’t you? Nice one. I loved it. đ
yep.. u got it right, Nethra đ
Never give up on love !! Even if lovers do đ
Nce đ
yeah.. the flower agrees with u, Nimue đ
betrothed to the four princes? is that possible? is it allowed? and where on earth?
i love your poem in a sense that she didn’t give up at all…til all four were betrothed to him?
lovely poem…;-)
in nature, Amity.. duh đ Princess Rose and the seasons four..
the earth and four seasons?
beautifully fit.
a rose, and four seasons, Trisha.. a rose sent by Him, and nurtured by Mother Earth.. đ
I liked it. Very royal.
thanks, Ina đ
A lovely tribute to nature written like a fairy tale with a twist and an unexpected ending! I like it!
thank you very much, Reason đ glad u liked the tribute to nature in the fairytale..
interesting, the way you wrapped fantasy and fairytale around a very realistic scenario…loved it đ
thanks for visiting my blog! happy rally
hi Bella đ glad u liked the wrapping of the story through verse.. twas a pleasure to visit urs too đ
I like this on!
thanks, Unnamed Psalmist đ
Leo,
Beautifully woven tale of the seasons.
Loved it.
Pamela
thanks, Pamela đ
Lovely rose….beautiful in all her seasons of life.
yes indeed, Heartspell.. always beautiful đ
liked the story .. and the rhyme..
cheerz,
thank you very much, Alakaline.. cheerz đ
A nicely woven story. The rhyme is great. The four princes, the bride and the mother. I had to re read to confirm I understood correctly. Beautiful poem. I am sorry for being late. I missed you out some how. đ
http://wordsworthmillions.wordpress.com/2010/11/18/counting-sheep/
its ok. glad u came back to it, Wordsworth Millions đ and glad you could understand the theme correctly…
LIked the tale very much! It was somehow surprising…thank you for sharing it with us, Leo. And I like your “Intro” about yourself – we are all eternally students, aren’t we?
yes, eternally students, all of us.. đ glad u liked the tale, Seasweetie đ
I love poems that convey a tale. Is this, perhaps, based on some fair tale I haven’t noticed?
no Panda, its based on a rose and her life through the four seasons đ here, there is no “autumn” as such..
Nice metaphor for the seasons. I’m still in winter here- next poem is
http://shawnbird.com/2010/11/21/winter-evening-tanka/
Thanks for popping by!
have a nice winter, Shawn.. will read ur winter post when possible đ
This one’s really cool.
A tale and a poetry in one.
Kudos to this hun!
Love,
B
thank you very much, B đ
Beautiful poem and a lovely story… đ
thanks very mch, Sumit.
Beautiful poem…
The princess Rose and The 4 princes….
I feel this is a simple,elegant,romantic and thoughtful poem…
I love the way you have described what the seasons does to the rose…
Very brilliant …….
thanks a lot, Rashmi đ glad u liked the simple yet elegant story in verse đ
I loved this, I loved how the story unfolded Leo.
Thank you
thanks LoLa đ
Wow! I loved this story! Its both sad and elocuent! and with a nice ending. đ Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed a lot reading it.
thanks very much, Lu Ann.. đ it was my pleasure to share for wonderful readers like you..!
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Amazing…great metaphor for seasons…
thanks, Hoiden đ
awesome piece!!! it totally sucked me in! sorry to be so late in returning the comment from week 33 life got crazy busy! happy holidays!
thats ok, Peaches đ glad u liked the poem.. Happy hols đ