I wonder whatβs out there
In the world past the sky
A cheesy blue moon and
Many twinkling stars shy
Are there other Earths?
Is there another little me?
Like a mirror in heaven
Like twins for me to see
Can I take teddy there?
And with him forever stay
To watch the sun rising
Each and every new day
Can I take some bread?
Thereβs that cheesy moon
I could be there by myself
And not return very soon
Image given at, and written for Monday’s Child – #13
Also given to Monday Poetry Potluck at Jingle Poetry
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
aawww…cute cute π
masttt ayaa poem π
short n sweeet π
aww.. masttt ayaa teri comment bhi, Meghu π glad u liked it..!
A nice children’s verse!! I think that all the kids will love it!! π Made me slightly hungry to read more π
burp! π full for now.. perhaps in next Monday’s child π
glad you liked it Rumz..!
cute! I like how he wants to take his teddy there. Makes me think about what I would want to take….hmmmm…
hmm, I’d take my diary perhaps.. so I can still write there π hehe… glad u liked it, She..!
love the curiosity shown in this piece.
very pleasant read!
thanks a lot, Ji π the mind of a child is always pleasant to imagine I feel π
smart move,
love the beautiful combination in it.
Happy Monday!
your support makes me smile!
ah, and your comment makes me do the same, Ji π thanks!
I absolutely love this write on this prompt….you can hear the awe, wonderment and adventure in it…in the voice of a child…Great Monday’s Child….bkm
thanks for finding it lovely, and hearing the awe, wonderment and adventure in it, Mackenzie π thanks also for the lovely inspiration as well..! π
innocence reflected perfectly… Cheers!!!
thanks a lot, Wiser Skydiver π
i can imagine reading this to my children when they were younger … so wonderful!
π thank u very much, Deborah.. glad u liked it.. perhaps ur children will enjoy reading it now too π
refreshing and nice..
thanks very much, Five Loaf π
Enjoyed yr poem, image is perfect too. Nice one
Warmest Salad
Luke
hehe, thanks a lot, Luke.. glad u liked my potluck.. image of course was thanks to Mackie! π
Aww…that was the cutest thought!! I used to (still do) think so myself !!
That cheese-like moon looks soooo enticing! π
oops… and forgot to add.. THANK YOU for participating in the Poetry Potluck! It really is great to have you here! π
great to be an ingredient in the pot π thanks K π
yummy moon, huh Kavi? π glad u liked the poem and the thought.. thank u..!
what a lovely poem!!! I love it
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thank u so very much, Gabriela π
Aww, well written. I really liked this.
thanks a lot, Thoughts Not Lost! π
I like the way you describe the moon as cheesy, somehow it sounds delicious to me :3~and very inviting….haha^^~ Thank for sharing at Poetry Potluck!:P
YUMMY moon π I want to go eat it too, Riika π glad u like it and found it inviting…
leo, this is another lovely piece from you! please keep on writing for all of us. you are so talented!
π thanks a lot, Pink Lady π glad u liked it.. yeah, certainly will keep writing..!
Sounds fun. Can I go with?
thanks a lot, Jen π sure.. lots of space on the moon I guess.. π
A beautiful and simple verse.Reflects a child’s innocence, his questioning mind and excitement. Very well captured in the poem.
thank you very much, Nanka π glad u liked the innocence, and the questioning mind of his that I’ve portrayed π
Completely charming … as charming as the child’s voice that it expresses. Nice work, Leo!
thanks very much, Jamie π glad u liked it.. yeah.. the voice needs that charm I feel too π
I really like this and you have portrayed a child’s thinking patterns so well – many years ago when we were shifting house I spoke to my wee son about the move and he asked if there would be a bed in the new house – your poem captures thoughts like these that children have. Excellent.
thanks a lot, Marilyn π glad u liked the post.. yeah, children have a good imagination..!
That’s a childs imagination right there.
great poem
thanks a lot, Arts Web Show π
Cute so cute so so so cute Leo. Blue Moon, Lovely rhyme…
–Someone Is Special–
thanks, Saravana.
Beautiful image to go along with a lovely poem. The blue moon sounds like a great place to escape. Have a wonderful week.
thanks very much, Rosidah.. glad u liked it.. I think it is a good place to escape too π
Lovely and simplistic, I can almost see that child hugging its teddy!
thanks very much, Amanda π the teddy is in his back pocket of course π
What a lovely poem. I would certainly go if I could take my teddy and stay there eating cheese and bread! Nicely done.
Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com
thank you Teresa.. have fun in the moon.. take your laptop too, so you can blog from there π hehe..!
Fun poem – but while I’m here, may I ask that you think about removing the word ‘forever’ in the third vers? It would help the flow of rhythm, I think… Hope you don’t mind my mentioning it? I’d like people to do they same for me, when reading my poems – it’d help me see things in a new light, therefore learn more…
hey, Jinksy.. π no problems, its good that u mentioned it too.. I like to hear what my readers feel as well, and learn..
will consider what u said for sure, and think of removing it.. glad u let me know..! π
Well done…and the poem “flows” just fine, imoh π
thank u very much, Tracy π glad u liked it..!
I loved … Is there another little me?
A lovely poem :o)
don’t think there is another u, Deborah π