Hatred
Abuses mind
Cramps my every thought
Confuses my love for loving
A smile
Hope strangulates my misery
Releases joys again
Life continues
Survives
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing to me are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
Myriad thoughts and feelings.Loved the Cinquain. :)Both the sets of five lines each conveys opposite feelings.Love this style of poems.
I have never thought of hope strangling misery; that juxtaposition makes me mentally queasy. You obviously have done this on purpose, for the effect; and I have certainly stopped to consider it!The challenge, for me, is that I find the juxtaposition so jarring that I start looking for other things to rest my mind on. Like whether I could class that line as an example of a subject complement, similar to appositives, and whether strangulate is a reasonable linking verb to do so.And then I start wondering about strangulate rather than strangle plus and additional syllable to get your syllable count right…So, that is a challenge that schock jocks have to overcome; getting their audience to move beyond the (perceived) shocking juxtaposition.However, I obviously have been thinking about what you wrote, no? So, success!Tschuess,Chris
Hate is not a word I like and you have portrayed that word very well.Well done.Yvonne.
Wow! Life continues and we survive.. Well Said Leo..Yours Frendly,Saravana Kumar M
Optimist words after all!!
Very well said. There's only one thing I hate. Hate.
Beautiful Wonderful Poem Leo 🙂 🙂
You've come up with a very positive thing when the prompt consisted of all the negative words!..that's amazing 🙂
hatred that weakens the mind and body…loved it 🙂
How true that hatred abuses the mind and cramps one's every thought. Hate and fear are both mind-killers. Good one, Leo!
@Rumya,thank u glad u liked it.. the cinquain of course dictates only syllables.. i chose to make the first half misery and second half joy 🙂
hope strangulates my misery..i think its amazing….true,hatred has damaging effects..
@Chris,yeah, strangulate was used for the syllables, but i do feel that any misery can be killed by hope..! 😀 so in this case, strangulate can be fitting for effect as well.glad it made u stop n think! 😀 welcome to my blog n glad u liked it!
@Yvonne,thanks very much! 🙂
@Saravana,thank u very much. indeed life goes on!
Deep. Liked it; but I fear it was way beyond me, given the consistent comments.Always up for new writing. Well, new to me anyway………dhole
I like what you did with the prompt here.http://thelaughinghousewife.wordpress.com
Life survives, yes, of course.. and it will always..
@Mar,thank u.. glad u liked it!
@Anthony,likewise 🙂
@Creativity,thank u!
@Jaspreet,most of my 3WW are positive.. i think even Thom would say so 😉 glad u liked it.
@Tweety,i hate my body tho.. what to do? 😛
@Lyn,yes. both mind killers indeed!
@Nikita,yes.. hope strangulates my misery indeed.. and agree with u on the hatred part too!
@Donna,many thanks!
@The Laughing Housewife,glad u liked it. thanks v.much!
@Ramesh,thank u! 🙂
Awweesomely Written! Hate is a powerful word and you have put that across well! 🙂 Yaay!
@Sonu,thanks dear! glad u liked it.. 🙂
The line that holds me up is "Life continues"…. yes, it does.and your poem has that quality of continuing in the minds and hearts of readers.Bravo.
@Julie,thank u very much! 🙂 glad that u found it good and for that beautiful comment too.
You take the reader there, and back again. I am glad this valleyed and climbed rather than peaked and fell, nice to leave it on the rise.The "hope strangulates misery" line is unique and thought provoking.
@Jay,yeah.. i like the fall and the rise than viceversa. glad u liked the line and the poem too 😀 thank u.
enjoyed the words of expression as one travels thru a day in contemplation…
@Piece of Pie,thank you very much. glad u liked it! 🙂
I echo Jaspreet's comment. A positive view using the three 'negative' words 🙂
@Shail,thank u very much. glad u liked it! 😀