Tearful eyes
She did let go
Lots of love
Yet new paths
She took to so
Angel of hers
Not understood
Her pain inside
Just few words
That seared both
Scars on mind
Some troubles
Life had her lent
In desperation
No hands to hold
Tired mind spent
Vicarious were
Thoughts mine
Pain I did see
Silent few tears
So many fears
Captive yet free
Just a glance
Into her heart
I felt her sorrow
She did let go
With heavy heart
Awaiting tomorrow
Very good structure! Keep writing!!!
Very nice leo…
Oh yes, what tomorrow can bring.
Very good keep up the good work.Yvonne,
I like the shape of this – indicating a drawn out process that has to run its course.
I could feel the pain too. Well written.
Amazing !!! I am sure most girls would relate themselves to it π Wonderfully written !
Nice one π
very nice poem…..full of pains and struggles, I could only see and feel!may tomorrow bring her better days!
brilliant..and nice structure π(ps. check out my latest post if you have time,,.thanks :3)
I liked your poem very much Leo. How to understand adequately; the feelings of another, departing, and waiting for an unknown tomorrow. Thanks for putting it to works. My best, Rob.
I like how you put it.ode to insomniaAlso don't forget to post your creative works at Monday Poetry Train Revisitedon Monday mornings!
Sooooooo Sooooooo Beautiful!!!!!!!!
@Aj,thank u very much.! π
@Deepak,thanks! π
@Anthony,thank u π
@Yvonne,thank u π
@Stan,i guess the structure counted too in the end π hehe..
@Aayushi,thank u very much! π
@Arti,thanks! π
@Shilpa,thank u! π
@Amity,thank u. i hope so too! π
@Ayu,thank u! :)i already have! π
@Rob,the pleasure is all mine. thank u! glad that u liked my effort.
@Gautami,thanks! will do so! π
@Sahana,thank u π
ah, to be able to let goso much can be seen and felt in a moment… thank you
Wow!!L_E_O_Amazing poemso lovely written :))
Hi Leo, those insights your poet had of her troubles went sooooooo deep, deeper than empathy ever could. I think it is true love for better or worse.Jim's One Single Impression is here..
Letting go. Does letting go of a past full of hurt mean also letting go of a present that could be full of hope? Does it all have to go over the side in order to balance the scales?Beautifully written Leo. As always.
Nice!
@Tammie,ah..thank u very much! π
@Anya,thank you! π
@Jim,thanks sir! π its a true love of friendship..
@Mojo,thanks.. i guess it shd just be letting go of past not the present! π
@Tumblewords,thanks!
A beautifully haunting poem, I must say. I feel her longing not to let go and the struggle within…but the hope of what tomorrow will bring. Lovely.
@Patti,i hope that hope in her continues burning.. glad u liked it..
…………………silence…!!!sometimes silence speaks more than words….!!!nice one..!!!
@Yam,guess so..