When failure occurs
Illusion seduces mind
Hope becomes ragged
Tidy thoughts start to falter
Ragged becomes hope
Illusion seduces mind
When failure occurs
Haiku Bones
Three Word Wednesday
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing to me are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
As they say….way to go, my boy :))Thought we were past all this….bring on new thinking Vinay…Only the young can :)wishes, devika
Yes, failure can do that. Ncely done.
awwwwww this is so very true.. u've read my mind very well 🙂
ok that is a sad note!but well donehttp://whenhekissesher.wordpress.com/2010/02/17/the-tidy-love/
@devika: thanks ma'am. i try to get new thinking, but sometimes, some thinking just persists. its not bad or good either. will do my best to innovate soon!@anthony: thanks very much! 🙂
@miya: is it? i had no idea. thanks! @desi: was on a positive run.. so took a negative break u can say! 😀
Very Much True!!!!!
I had a bit of trouble with the line "Illusion seduces mind," but re-reading in the whole context, I think it works.
@sahana: thanks very much! :)@thom: when we fail, we are captured by the illusion that we are always a failure. thats what i intended to say! 🙂
Well said and done. I like the polish of this.
a reality check as usual..a nice write..!!!
@mark: thanks! 🙂 glad u liked it!@maddy: thank u dear! glad u tht it a reality check! 😀
Very nice, Leo. We always figure out some blame for why we fail. I envy you, I have never tried writing these ______ poems. (Not the correct name, but I would call this one a very nice inside out or upside down Senryū.)..
Really liked this one. Good job.
I can't seem to write these myself- for me they are very challenging, but you pull it off with ease. happy 3WW!
Hi Leo, thanks for the reality check! And many thanks for posting this.
Hiya, Cool stuff! It would be good if you could put a link to this on the NaiSaiKu challenge? site, as I'm sure our readers would enjoy reading this too. I like the way you got the three words in!!
We live and learn – it's all about starting over.
I missed this one..:)So true to the core…we are so carried by our emotions once failure occurs and all we could see next seems to be the best but the truth is, they're nothing but are just there to mislead our true feelings!Beautifully written!
Oooh, this is nice! Wise, and excellent incorporation of the three words.
Hey, Nice one Leo. BTW where have you gone. Why you have decided to abstain from my place!! Lol. Drop in dear and share your views. God Bless.
sad but true one Leo
@jim: they're naisaiku poems. and u can try for sure! u can write any form u put ur mind to i think! :)@angel: thanks! glad u liked it!@dp: thanks! 😀 happy 3ww. do try naisaiku!@andy: thanks! glad u liked. was a pleasure posting it!@wendy: thank u! will post it now! 🙂
@stan: yes indeed!@amity: exactly! glad u liked it!! :)@thomma: thanks a lot!@saras: thanks sir! busy with work. will hop urs soon!@dee: thanks!
I loved "Illusion seduces mind". Well done. -Tim Mine is here: http://timremp.blogspot.com/
Hi Leo, many thanks for linking 'Reality Check' on the NaiSaiKu site btw, you've been on the blogroll there since last August when you wrote 'The Copse'.
leo – reality check is marvelousand helpful.
Very nice, very nice!
So true, and nicely done!
I like this!! The way it's written!! But, the message.. yeah it's sad and true!!
"Tidy thoughts start to falter." I liked this line, it captures the impending doom at that moment you realize failure had become an option after all.I like the symmetry of this poem style as well. Great work!
@tim: thank u very much! :)@wendy: welcome! 🙂 and yeah, i forgot! 😀
@mia: thanks! :)@tumblewords: thank u! 🙂
@nushy: thank u! :D@ann: thanks a lot!@jay: exactly! 🙂 thanks a lot! 🙂