Walking in the rain
None sees my tears
None feels my pain
No hope I see near
Mind seems adrift
In the river of fear
This veil must lift
Afar must be sorrow
Fortunes shall shift
Yet where to go
For revival to begin
I still do not know
Chances seem thin
Yet battle on I shall
For it is must I win
Form: Terza Rima
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
heyy..its gudd yr..:) simple wrds b'fuly expressed..nice imagination..!!!
Very inspiring words , I loved the positive words at the end.Yvonne.
very beautifully written, the form of poetry is Terza Rima?but the message is sad….walking in the rain? should be romantic, but that is your thought,went back to sad themes again?…:)
nicely worded bro…hope everything is ok with ya :)..urs..hemu..
Beautiful Fabulous Lines Vinay 🙂 🙂
Enjoyed the form and the write, though there's a sense of despair in the lines. Liked the spirit of the thought to battle on.Wonderfully written as always Kunju.
very good.. but first two lines seems soooooooooooo similar to Charlie Chaplin's quote na???
its a really fantabulous poem leo !!! luvd it a lot !!!
hey leo,nicely framed.. really beautiful.. 🙂
simply my type…subtle,sincere,optimistic.
I like the simplicity of your compositions.. simple and touching .. so its easier to connect with thoughts..
Wow!Sublime.
beautiful…..!!!
@maddy,thank u very much 🙂
@yvonne,yeah 🙂 without positivity, its not very interesting i guess 🙂
@amity,msg is sad? no no, it starts sad and goes to positivity ma'am :)and walking as a couple in rain is romantic.. walking alone, who to romance ma'am? 😀 heheh…
@hemz,as right as rain bro 🙂 thank u!
@sahana,thank u very much 🙂
@swapna,thanks chechy. yeah, sort of despair beginning, but positive ending! 🙂
@miya,yeah, the quote is sort of inspiration for the poem 🙂
@kitten,thank u very much! 🙂
@shriti,thank u! glad u liked it!
@anwe,exactly! 😀 glad u liked it re!
@aria,simplicity conveys thoughts best i guess! 🙂
@escapewine,thank u 🙂
@yamii,thanks very much re!
wonderful poem vinu.. :)loved it 🙂
@suma,thanks very much! 🙂
hey..it must go on ..just step ahead and feel the joy..
@prams,yes indeed! will do that! 🙂
even though this had something positive in the end still it is very painful and sad….a hatrick of lonely poems…cant accept them as fiction…Leo…now I am worried…what happened…dont be upset plzzzzzzzzzzz…everything will go fine…how can you feel so lonely when we are all here for you…you deserve to be happy for spreading so much of happiness and warmth around than why are you so low..its not nice to c u like that…please cheer up …u look better smiling….so common now…
simple yet soo beautifully said dear:)…
@parzi,the first one, not fiction i agree. did feel like quitting yesterday! a small disagreement with a friend made me off color! but this is fiction! :)thank u so much for that encouraging words! 🙂 god bless u too 🙂
@nan,thanks a lot! 🙂