When you were taken
Against your will
A tear slid out with grace
No words could give you solace
When you were taken
The world lost a beauty
A tear slid out with lament
Forever you shall be⦠Innocent
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*insontis by graphicqueen91(deviantart)
Vinay Leo R.
Poetry & writing are to me, a breath of fresh air in a life that is sometimes covered by the smoke of sorrow or self doubt. They also become the sweets I share to celebrate when life offers me a reason to. But most of all, they are to me, my life. For each word I write is a piece of my heart, a thought that just had to find its way into the world.
err who/what were u talking about? :O
actually i was thinking of a baby…innocence perfectly describes a baby doesn’t it, chechu..?? π
vinay, the poem is so beautiful even though i dint get the proper meaning. i was guessing so many things and 1 of my guesses was closer to it. but now after reading ur comment to divz i am finding this poem so much more beautiful, deep and meaningful. yes innocence perfectly describes a baby.:)
Precise and pensive!!Too many meanings can be portrayed through these verses..It makes one’s imagination run wild.. nice and neat!!Keep it up!
innocently beautiful…most i dint get but the poetic expression was awesome :)..urs..hemu..
It suits a girl child.With female foeticide becoming common, this would be a wonderful way to put across the lament of the girl child! Wonderfully thought out Leo
you know preeti and divvi made me read that and asked whats that about… and surprisingly i have got the meaning at once.. your poem is so beautiful and with such a deep meaning, really.. makes one stop and think.Very good work done π
Lovely use of words and rhyme. Bful
its pure bliss to read..
multiple meanings,, out thr for sure,, Vinay.. but beautifully penned.. π carves a meaning at so many diffrnt relationships,, but read ur description abt baby n innocence.. :-)eternal,, indeed.. π
ya vinay..u know wat preeti’s guess was???is it about a rose being plucked?hahahahaahahahhahahahahahahahhaand she says- my meaning got so close :Profl:D
Nice one, leo.Very well described….Infanticide is one crime that cannot be forgiven. Very aptly penned.
i pictured a baby that loses its life in a terror attack.. the word innocence portrayed the baby and i guess in the present scenario, that is what i thought of at first.
Was it the flower you just talked of?? Or maybe it was people in general… hmm… this make more sense!! I get it!! I’m a little innocent too you know!! :PSee you when I see you…
Beautifully Penned!! I LOVED IT~~Ne
Beautiful. I thought u wrote about a lost soul.
Very well written, Though, atfirst, I didn’t get what you meant:)
its great that u put it in only so many words..
Pure happiness..that is what your words gave me..thank you..wishes.. mip
thanks for the lovely review preethi…!!glad u loved it…
er, yes fiducia… there can be more than one meanings to this piece…anyways… glad u loved it…
mithe,why only a girl child?? nah…its a good way to put out the cause, definite… but i was thinking of children in general!!thanks for the thoughts…!! π
thanks lena,i sort of knew u would get it…but still…!! :Pthanks for that very nice comment!! π
the lover,thanks da!! π
hey divz,it could portray that too!! :)even a rose being plucked… the world loses a beauty…!! :)but yeah, i dint interpret it that way…!! π π
riversoul…thanks bro…!! π
loss of a baby’s life… however it may be, is a sad thing…infanticide or terror attack… i wanted to convey the loss being sad…! :(and ur picturing in that way also is ok divvy…!! π
pranav…firstly, welcome to my blog!! :)i talked abt a baby…!! :)makes more sense now?? :Pwill head to ur space soon…!! π
hey Ne,thanks a lot!! π
aneesh,welcome again man…!!and thanks for the review!! :)not many got what i meant in first attempt!! π
sometimes, 2 verses can convey what a whole poem cant…!!glad u liked it nivedita…
beautiful :)liked the new look template too..all the best for your exams..
You captivate innocence in eternity with your words…Nice poetry…
lines laced with immense grief… nastabodam thudikunna varikal…
Beautifully put.I like your shorter poems better. I wanted to say this earlier also.
aria,thanks a lot…welcome back to the blogger world..hope to see a post from my fav old style poet soon…!! π
nanni, anoop…inniyum varoo..!! π
mampi, thank you!!and u had said it before too…!! π
The last two lines of the second paragraph..my loves.I like things,short and sweet..so did I like this.Kudos
guessed it right dint i ?I art the best π :PLovely poem!
Thought Provoking one mate… lovely poetry :)Have a nice day.. .cheers…
thank you aayu…!! :)glad u loves it!! π
yup u guessed right…!! :)thanks meenzie…!!
what were this word about??? sorry, but i dint get your thouhgt…
dude how do u think of such things??
Ermm..I seem to never get anything in return from you (like an award)..=PLol..moophat me ! π
hey yamini, i was talking about infanticide…sad thing isn’t it?? π
mayz…its easy bro… put ur heart to it… relate with imagination!! it will be easier for u than it was for me…
Truly beautiful!
lovely poem.. short and sweet…
hey tanvi, thanks a lot!! π
Short and Sweet…Nice one, Vinay :)wishes, devika
That was sad but beautiful!Good luck for exams π
This is little beauty, both in thought, concept and expression. A fine poem!
thanks devika!! π
thanks for the beautiful comment usha!! π
Hiyaa Vinay..saw ur comment on my space.. have messed up smthn sumwhr.. da non techie tat i m.. π wil try n rectify it.. dunno how,, yet!!
such a lovely thought , beauty
do so soon muzingz!! :)and thanks for droppin in!! π
hey shal, thank you!! π glad u liked it!! π
thinking of the victims? it must be hard to die when u least want it ..at least not before you’ve said a proper goodbye
hey farah,yep, what u say is true!! its the hardest to leave without saying bye…
Wow, you have a great poetic heart! Keep it coming! Good job dear!Welcome to my blogβ¦β¦.Wishing you in advance “A Merry X’Mas and A Happy New Year”
hey susan, thanks for the wishes, and the welcome… will try n come soon to ur blog…bye…
innocence beautifully portrayed…!! π well done…!!
thanks rhythm!