One morning I woke up,
to find nothing beside me.
The sunshine only just streaming,
through dark storm clouds,
that I noticed was my new ceiling.
The 4 walls around me,
that had once held me prisoner,
trapped me in a corner
ever since I had known,
had vanished into thin air.
A small drizzle began to form,
sprinkling its waters onto the earth.
I could not see a flower
opening its petals wide,
to accept those soothing waters.
Not another soul I noticed,
as I walked the barren terrains.
No cheerful echoes of the past
or the present I could sense,
Happiness seemed drained from this world.
I finally came across a river,
went to lie by its side.
As I dipped my hands
into its cool waters for a sip,
the water suddenly turned into sand.
Then I came to a garden,
saw some roses in its midst.
As I reached with my hands
to pluck one out,
the petals suddenly became thorns.
As I walked the streets,
I could see homes appear from nowhere.
Tried as I did, in vain
To enter one’s hallowed halls,
the gates suddenly engulfed in flames.
Where was I?
What was I doing here?
Questions just popped up
as if its seeds
were being watered by the rain.
No seeds of my mind
gave me any answers.
Then I heard a bell ring,
somewhere in the distance.
The world in front of my eyes
began to vanish in a misty haze.
I thought the earth would eat me whole.
Then I opened my eyes again,
saw my room as it was before,
then to my immense relief
or my never ending horror,
realized that I had first woken in my dreams.
Was my dream a vivid vision
of the future to come?
The way this world is going
maybe this is the future
that is imminent….
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*kept waking yp byΒ cookiemonstah
**Post is a repost…
**According to my diary, its dated 12/7/2002
wow, ur non-rhyming poem had a greater impact on ur chechu π and ur peoms are always a cut above the rest π
wowww… what a vivid description of future.powerful poem indeed.
What a vision!!!:)Awesome and awe-inspiring!!
wow…!!!!just i am in search of words….let me come back to you wen i find some….
Then I opened my eyes again,saw my room as it was before,then to my immense reliefor my never ending horror,realized that I had first woken in my dreams…(Oh My God! What A shock!)You somehow surmised the future-didn’t you? Or its just your ability to take the bigger picture into mind that has come to fore in this poem? Whatever it is but this poem has hit me like nothing before-beautiful,outstanding, out of the world Leo! I really liked this poem.Do you mind if I print it out for pasting in my new room?
nice read..a vision of future?yes,maybe..water turning into sand,rose to thorns..yes..n penned in 2002,poet ur a pro!!kudos!!
good one. A whole vision in the form of a poem.Keep up:)
As gr8 i find this work, leo,As i found your other works Bfore.Wonderful. Never knew you’d got a diary though.:)And thats pretty much old.:)Good work:)
ur description in poetic lines reely kept me glued….niice:)
nice lines.. and hey, future wont be that bleak π it will be better than present…
non rhyming words had greater impact?? :Pi shd think of getting my older works online then, lot of them dont rhyme itself!! :)thnks chechu!! π
thanks preetilata!!
loss of words yamini?? in a good sense i hope!! :Pthank u!! π
mithe,thanks for the kind words…thanks a lot…taking a printout?? m honored u think my work deserves such credit… but i frankly donno whether to accept or say no…
anwesa, i am not a pro…!! :Pi been writing since long time thats all…!! π :)thanks for ur kind words…
thanks riversoul,yeah i have a diary…!! π π
anoop,thanks…i know it may not be that bleak, but it can be too…!! π
good lines dude …it impacts the future :)..urs..hemu..
Quite an old though,no?But that did not make it lose its mettle..a good one,Vinay! :))Cheers!
Very descriptive, and yes, one wonders where humankind is headed… :(Nice one again!
i love your blog and your works.. keeps me inspired.. =)lucky i found your blog! =)hahaha..keep it up and be safe. =)–cynthia
very well written but i do wish ppl would stop expressing such hopelessness in humankind..good to know that you write your poems in your journal and go back and reread them..same here except i top it off with tears and a “how much i have changed”
Well… I wont be surprised if I woke to a day like that mate given the way our mankind has been treating this planet and everything on it.Quite a descriptive flow of thoughts… liked it a lot mate… Cheers…
thanks hemz…!! π
thanks aayu!! :)glad it did not lose its mettle!!
hey usha, thanks a lot!! :)one wonders that indeed!! π
niveditha,i dont always express hopelessness in humankind, usually i am the positive reinforcement kind of guy!! perhaps this post is like that!!
thanks arv…
An illusion all dreamy can make you feel that way and sometimes to merge into that makes us feel satisfied at that moment.
I won’t do it unless you say so Leo. It’s ok..I still have its record on net though.In your blog of course!:)
no vinay ..don’t say that…please..tomorrow will be better..i hope
Hi Leo, I think your doubt is realistic…the future is so stark and dark at times, it requires great strength to get ourselves back on track…at that point i would say, one should stop looking at the world and just look at oneself, be one with God…one definitely will be guided..that was my experience all these years :)FAITH is a good thing to hold…in God as well as in humans…and one should learn to be all in oneself…i don’t know if these words are of any use..but reading you, i wanted to write it…Poem is good…but may be, you should read more…poetry by itelf comes on its own, but reading an add perspectives in you..just a thought shared…wishes, devika
wonderful illusion created, beautiful imagery.. though somehow it feels that it was written long ago.. you have improved a lot since that time π Keep writing and improving. And am expecting the book of your poetry coming out soon π
This sounds more like a nightmare than a dream, I hope its not a vision of the future
i hope things get better soon…uff m tired of livin such an insecure life π
helloooooooo!! i yam back! and thank you so much for keeping me alive in bloggersville :)i surely do hope its not a message from the future, the dream you had. sounds horrible but what with the current scenario, doesn’t sound too far from reality either. its so scary π
thanks for ur thoughts priya!! π
farah,its a fiction… am not saying tomorrow will have to be like this!! π
thanks for ur words devika…glad u liked it…hope the future is not like this anyways…!vinay.ps: i am unable to review at ur blog, it says comments open to group members only…
hey janu!! :)ya i know…its nice to hear that i have improved!! :)book of poetry?? hope so!! π
nick, isn’t nightmare a bad dream? technically, it is a dream nonetheless!! :Peven i hope it isn’t a vision of the future!! π
tinni,i hope ur hope comes true!! π
divvy, glad to see u back on my blog gal!! π missed u a lot!! π :)ya i know it doesn’t sound far from reality, but i hope as time passes, it does move far far away!! π
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Things will change. I liked this poem, it’s fantastic.
bill,thank u, thanks a lot…means a lot to have won the award!! π
A powerful one
Good one Vinay. Keep it going..
hey shal…thanks!! π
thanks rhythm!! π
Lovely π
you tought all these in 2002? sensible words. looking at the world day by day it seems the humans lost the humanism.
wow!lovely… yours words make me see things…:):)again.. wow!:)
glad that u could imagine it…!! π