Let me die…
This life of mine is like a lie,
Every moment I do not try,
I feel like an empty shell.
Let me die…
If I cant make you laugh,
Is it right I gift you tears?
Make your joys disappear.
Let me die…
How is this me?
This is not who I want to be.
This is acting, reality.
Let me die…
Let me die, and be reborn,
Like a phoenix from the ashes.
A stronger, better me…
Share joys, not sorrow,
Not living on time borrowed,
A positive joy
ful me…
ful me…
Let me die…

Pic:
*birthofthephoenix by ladyberii(deviantart)
commented 😉
Wonderful concept, Leo.I understand it now.And i loved d phoenix reference….. Awesome. All in all, a very good piece.:)
Nice! I like the last part the rhyming words sorrow and borrowed go so well together. The photo would make a great painting!
hey why frown and a dark poem yaarwill read ur other posts soonwww.thesolitarywriter.blogspot.com
a very smart poem you know.. those who would say it is dark seem to have misread it or not read attentively.A very deep poem, Vinay :)Good job!
one more award for ya 😛
Congrats on the awards.
TO die and to be reborn!! I love that.. You make me really think one Stanza at a time when I read your poems.. You do a great job!! again I loved this poem!! wooo hooooo!!! COngrats on your awards also!! You are a great person… I will send you that invite….Ne
Kaash aisa ho sakta…(for the girlchild I mean). This can provide a great social message too. nice work!By the way-why disable comments? I won’t say ‘congrats'(lolzz)
I feel like an empty shellgo ahead and open that empty shellfind da most beautiful pearl on earthIs it right I gift you tears?you are very true about thisu gift us the tears of happinesshow is this me?be what you want to bewe love you for the way you arenice post…keep penning…!!!
a beautiful piece in itself..a fathomless deep philosophy lies here n it seems so simple in ur words.
wow chechu 😛
nick, thanks..!!i take credit for the rhyme, but the pic credit goes to ladyberii!! loved it!!
solitary writer,welcome to my blog!! and the poem isn’t dark…!! its abt the darkness being reborn in light…!! sad thoughts changing to joyful ones…etc etc!!
mampi thanks!! u dint tell me how u found my poem!!
Mithe,nice viewpoint dear…!!comments disabled simply!! 😛
yamini, u changed ur pen name??cool re…nice viewpoints, loved ur replies…! but its not an autobiographic post da…!! just a mixture of thoughts!! 🙂
anwesa, thanks!! 🙂
if only we could mate…if only I could… :)its a good one mate… loved it… cheers…
hey arv…wish i could too!! :)cheers…and thanks for lovin it!! 🙂
Reborn from ashes! beautiful thought 🙂
thanks winnie!! 🙂
hmm go dien come again!!
lol joie!! its not autobiographic dear!! 🙂
Hi Leo, Nice one…felt like you have writte for me :)and YEAH, Congrats on the award…You got a beautiful blog..:)so many awards seen across today…Wish all were real…i kind of hate this virtual world at times :))sorry, if i’m wrong..its a personal opinion..not there for a debate :)wishes, devika
hey devika,written for u?? lol..!thanks for the compliment!! :)vinay.ps: am not good with debates either!
Hi Vina..oh, i called you Leo earlier..don’t mind that..happens with me :)and this thinking that poets write for me is a notion that started very early in life…and its then that I appreciate poetry…then it becomes like a sedative to my mind :)that’s not to reduce the compliment..the poetry, along with picture was really, really good… :))wishes, devika
I love coming back here again and again…and for good reason 🙂 … Been sending out links of my fav poems by you to family and frnz… you make so much sense vinay…. I absolutely love your poems…Keep rocking 🙂
hi devika,u can call me leo or vinay…!! not a problem!! :Psedative is it?? oh…glad u liked it anyways!! 🙂
smriti,love having u here too dear…!! sending out links of my poems!! wowie…cool!! 🙂 glad u liked em..!!take care!!
Hi Vinay…yeah kind of a sedative…read more of my insane mind there :))wishes, devika
that was nice dude!! I really liked this piece of yours a lot!! Actually became quite your fan! 🙂
You are getting more mature in your poetry buddy,it’s very obvious to me since I am reading you after a long time.Way to go! 🙂
hey devika,will read soon!! 🙂
yippee, sami is back to my blog!! :)mature in poems? i hope so…
i give u life…but all u want, is to diei give u hope…but all u want, is to cryi give u reality…but all u want, is a lullabyi give u reason…dont u c, that all u need is to try?this came to me after i read ur poem..may or maynot make sense but phir bhi likh diya… :)lovely poem as usual bro..n sammy is right..ur poems get better n more addictive day by day :)))
u r a great poetess too!! :)what a composition!! 🙂 :)thanks tinni!! 🙂
dude i have been missin here…n now i feel really badabt it co have been missin some real good stuff…blogrollin ya
gooood stuff! almost like a song! :Dscribblers Inc.
hey mayz..!thanks for the kind words!! and thanks for the blogroll too!! 🙂
so many make this wish to die, to be reborn, to have never taken birth… if only it were true.. I liked the lines ‘Let me die, and be reborn’ nice antithesis..
gauri,welcome to my blog.as i have said to some others b4 u, its not an autobiography dear!! :Djust a collection of random thoughts!!do visit again soon!! 😛
U hav the right to gift tears when u love ..
yep..!! 🙂 nice thought farah!! 🙂
I loved the phoenix part…good rhyming…:)
thanks manju!!
let u die?? not a chance…!! not while i am alive!
WOW … loved it …especially the line “This is acting, reality” BTW thanks a lot for visiting my blog =D
glad u loved it…u dont need to thank me for visiting ur blog…!! 🙂
why ? why ? why ?ok. assume its auto-granted. you’r now new. live a positive life 🙂
thanks aditya!! 😀
hi…this is one of ur best…:)…liked it very much…
thank you! 🙂