If I want to be, a part of you,
I would want indeed, to be your tear,
To start from those lovely black eyes,
Slowly slide down, that rosy cheek,
To find, what I seek,
Those beautiful red lips,
To die there,
Just blessed,
Forever.
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*sorrow longing tears by westia
Ps: a friend informs me that something on similar lines had already appeared as an sms forward long back. if so, then my work has nothing whatsoever to do with that work. my humble applause to whoever dreamed up the other work as well, you could say you were an invisible inspiration!! π thanks…
That was so beautiful…short but said everything that could be said. I was chatting with the love of my life and i copied and pasted these lines to him (with a disclaimer that it wasnt my work). He doesnt visit blogs unfortuantely. π But I loved these lines π
Hmmmm… Thats one way of doing it…well written mate… cheers…
Nice..not too good..but yes…nice
aha! wat r u thinkin of?
Ah what a poetic thought !I would love to be a dream though.. Twinkle in his eyes.. color his dreams and then live in his heart forever π π
hey smriti…thank u for loving my poem…!! :)and also hope ur love liked it..!! thanks for disclaiming…!
hey farah,me thinking of my sweetheart…who else!! π
Wah…wah..wah..wah…Beautiful Vinay….
plz drop ur id on my blog.
Amazing piece of PoetryThe simple lines tht u weave touch my heart at the core !!
thankoo diana…!! π
thanks for those sweet words L…!! π
similar to the forwarded msgs we get on the cell phone π π
lol lukky…!! :)what makes u say that??
Being obsessed or a part of obsession…
huh??? waht do u mean priya??
VI, this just gave me an idea for something else…check out my page.I was intending to to ask you look at it at a vision different than just death, and ended up writing this.Thnx to you. And need I say I loved this ?!:)
I meant how you carved the beauty of art when you really dwelve deep into it.
Nice work dude.:)A tear…Very well written. A little short, but nonetheless a good piece.:)
:P..i dint know who the lover of vinay is…but she is lucky :)..urs..hemu..
aaaaaaaaahhh..lucky gal!! very very sweet vinay…beautiful thot there π
hey i loved ur vision too cin!! π
yeah, it is meant to be short riversoul…its a form of poetry called a nonet!! π
i’ll inform her of what u said…she says so a hundred times a day too!! :Dthenx hemz!!
thanks tinni!! π
lol @ p.sby the way vinay… i thought a nonnet has got something to do with the syllables of the word rather than the word itself….at least thats what the definition said π i dont know much about it thoughthe first line of ur poem has 9 syllables…so does the second. third has 8, and so does the fourth , and so on…
oh is it?? i dint note the definition well so i tht it related to words…!! thanks for telling me lukky…will try and get it right next time…!!@riversoul…correction pal, my work isnt a nonnet, though u can expect one soon!! π
Good thoughts must travel, whoever writes.Very nicely done,
thanks mampi!! π
even i read it bfr but thn i came to UR PS note abt the poem.. its too good. loved it very much :)take care
thanks preeti…!! π
this one was really nice…!!!it doesn matter how many good days u spnd wid ur frnd wat matters is re u thr by thr side in grey times!!!
nice piece..well done vinu..:)
Poetry is a Subtle Art… But You’ve Conquered it big time:)Once more, A masterPiece!!!